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In Wonderland

My heart was pounding
given choice of
paper boat or balloons.
I jumped into the boat
grabbing balloons as sails.

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Free verse
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hmmm
interesting write
it makes me think

IRiz

thanks IRiz ..appreciate your visit...good to know it made you think...i may be tweaking it up a bit...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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thanks April for your visiting this page...yes, this is about fantasy and thrill...grabbing the opportunity when it knocks on the door..
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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