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Which is which?

It is sad how we are locked in illusions
Or are illusions enclosed in us?
Do we choose to live in seclusion?
Or has solitude always been in us?
Are we born pessimists?
Or we run optimism out of us?
Do days and nights really exist?
Or are shadows and lights reflected from us?
which is which, I am not quite sure,
I think I still need to learn pretty much.

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you give a pretty definite answer,
which is that the answer is between the questions.

I can't quite decide whether this is profound or trite.

But I do know I don't like poems made of questions. It is far more effective to make your poetry raise questions without asking them.

cheers,
Jess
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as jess says - all the question marks take the reader's mind from the write

i have a couple of suggestions for better grammar :)

Or solitude has always been in us?
- Or has solitude been always in us?

Or shadows and lights are reflected from us?
- Or are shadows and lights reflected from us?,

I think I still need to learn prettily much.
- I think I still need to learn much more.

a good write i think
pertinent and interesting questions
love judy
xxx

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shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

for your suggestions . I am happy you like it.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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"I think I still need to learn prettily much."
..i think it sounds better when you use the word "pretty"?! as for the questions..it gives the reader a lingering thought, before proceeding to the next line..which i like the effect on me.. ;)

happy to to get a new friend to read my words..

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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