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What is Normal

Submitted by Jasmine. on Mon, 2016-10-24 17:06

What is normal?
Is there such a thing?
What is normal for you
Is not normal for me

I lost my sense of balance
There is nothing good
Nor evil nor eternal
Although I fumble for it

It's twinkling miserably
It's beautiful, isn't it?
That's why I live in a fantasy
Even though it's real life
I see what I want to see

There's nothing that is exactly a fact
Even a lie which makes one happy
Give me lies, for I could dream
Give me lies, for my anxiety fades
As I sob bitterly with happiness

Kissed in a sigh after a bitter smile
So I believe in small things, very small
Like a soap bubble
Flashed away, breeze scatter

Somewhere in this world
A phantom flower; normal
It is said so exactly
It is supposed to be so absolutely
It could become an elixir
It must be life

To pursue it, might just
Continue a stupid journey
It is a violent poison
It eats human beings
What I have seen
What I have felt
I am the way I am

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lovedly

Mon, 2016-10-24 22:24

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it indicates each poetic line you paste
is a statement

Kindly edit this
remove caps where not due
and see how poetry comes out from you .
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Jasmine.

Mon, 2016-10-24 23:51

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Capitalizing the first letter of each beginning word in a line of poetry is traditional, if not contemporary. So it would seem my sin is I am not contemporary, but I am also not wrong.

To capitalize or not is a choice, you choose not to and I choose too. This does not make me a bad poet, it makes me a traditional one.

Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem.

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Sparrow

Tue, 2016-10-25 04:01

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Here you capture that reason for being a free thinker and dreamer.
Why should the world be so black and white.
I saw you run through the trees, turning the odd leaf to just show that you wanted to.
Makes madness sound like reality or reality a kind of madness.
Who cares?????
You keep writing these pieces, they will eventually speak of the true you hidden there among the words.
We scream at the world, yet the world awaits for that quiet time when we just whisper.
Yours, Ian.x

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

Sparrow

Tue, 2016-10-25 04:01

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Here you capture that reason for being a free thinker and dreamer.
Why should the world be so black and white.
I saw you run through the trees, turning the odd leaf to just show that you wanted to.
Makes madness sound like reality or reality a kind of madness.
Who cares?????
You keep writing these pieces, they will eventually speak of the true you hidden there among the words.
We scream at the world, yet the world awaits for that quiet time when we just whisper.
Yours, Ian.x

.
Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

Jasmine.

Tue, 2016-10-25 04:39

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Conformity you are the death of all.
These ways, their ways
Restrain and confine
They make you something who is not you

But I sit at a table
Though small it may be
Where others can share if they please
Come breathe the free air with me

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