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WHAT ISN'T THERE

Give me not the wilderness of stars
which sparkle there seductively
for I know how they really are.
They care not for you and me.

Their home is space, sterile and cold
as is their spare light when darkness falls
and they're unbelievably old
hidden in between the parsec's walls.

That wilderness of time and space
is no place for soul or mind.
It recognizes not my soul or face;
to sanctity of life it's blind.

All that cold bland emptiness
All that mindless sensory deprivation
All that emptiness
emptiness...
nothingness

just me

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are words used by me often
stan
glad you do use
em freely
they belong to
the thesaurus
not exclusively
me only
you know how jess would have kicked me
for such egoistic poetry
but now Gee will
just wait and sea

I almost asked your permission to use those words lol. Thanks for dropping by

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lol should be enough

that the stars are supposed to be the stuff of life, yet they seem so cold and distant. Much like some people, maybe they are the aliens? Interesting morphology. Hmmmm. ~ Geez.
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were u ever a biolojist xgx

Not a biologist, but I wanted to be. ~ Geez.
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rumored to have been lost drifting into space and what they must have thought of the new wilderness. And you are right many people are also cold and distant

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of them in many years! I too, wonder [if it were true] and if someday, they would be found by another race of beings, drifting through space and wondered about. Would they think that they were just foolish people that had gotten lost or would they think that they were just abandoned? [In the interest of science of course]. ~ Geez.
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rumored to have been lost drifting into space and what they must have thought of the new wilderness. And you are right many people are also cold and distant

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Your poetry has gone from strength to strength. You've managed to instill some awe in me.
Thanks man.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

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Instilled awe? Well that leaves me speechless

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Good stuff Stan! This piece captured the same feelings I have every time I ponder my own insignificance when I take the time to look up at night - well done!

Best

Michael Anthony

I am please this hit a note with you

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We are the universe and the universe is we.
Nothing is wasted.
One love
A perception of God my friend.
Don't ask me where all that came from but it was fun letting it spill.
I have the same opinion as Jim... outstanding poetry.
Didn't even notice the rhyme until the second reading. You're a natural at it.
Later,

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Even one such as I stubbles around and pens something good once in a while lol. i guess getting people to think of stuff only remotely related to a poem is a good thing

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