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What I Wished For You

Imagine
a world without pain
and the sunrise
cast the world in a golden hue.

Imagine.
The laughters of children,
unending
and the smiles that people wear
are not tainted by hypocrisy.

Imagine.
A gust of wind blew
and the leaves on the trees rustles
while the grasses wave in greeting.

Imagine.
All the troubles you have,
cleared away
and we walk together
hand in hand
as brothers and sisters.

This is what
I wished for you,
that you'll be well
happy and contented
with this life.

Even if all these
are wishful thinking,
I still pray
that you'll find your way
to live with joy
and full of love,
never regretting
when it's time
to say goodbye.

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one day I will be dead...my body rests
my spirit goes on
excellent positive energy in this one
God Bless!

W

Thanks for the visit, the rea and the comment. Glad you liked it.

Alid

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I hope the same for you, wouldn't
it be nice to remove all the labels and
just accept people ... Imagine.

Just wanted to say your poem
felt warm ... and that's a good thing!!!

thanks for the visit, tje read and the kind words. Wish you well wherever you are.

Alid

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okay, I can't be certain my interpretation of this is correct, but I understand this as the end of a relationship with no bitterness from you, which is the only way. Relatable to me, because this is how I felt when my own ended. Unfortunately, the other party wasn't so understanding! Think this is a lovely write from someone with a good heart. Best wishes, Indie.

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Though I am fully female
I could have been a man
yet I was blessed with x and x
as this was good god’s plan

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Nice to meet you. Not true. I dedicated this poem to some of my friends here who are very ill and yet continue to inspire. Itis because of them that I continue to write poetry when I almost give up and managed to be one of the malay poets who represented my country in malay poetry. I owe them so much.They are good people. I missed them and I wished the best for them, This is not first poem I write for them. There's another one entitled "A Message From A Friend".

Thanks for the visit, the read and the comment. I didn't login here as often as I used to these days due to family commitments and my involvement in malay poetry, so it's nice to meet new friends. Thanks again.

Alid

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just proves what an amateur I am, hey! Thanks for your reply :)

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Though I am fully female
I could have been a man
yet I was blessed with x and x
as this was good god’s plan

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it has been my pleasure.

Alid

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