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WHAT I CALL LOVE

The profound and caring
the strong affection
the feeling of intense
the object of one’s liking
it’s something extreme
Something indefinable.

A term of friendship
A desire for life partner
It’s infatuation
It’s exceptional
It’s adorable
And I call it LOVE.

Love is when you met someone
Look him in the face speechlessly
Feel changes in heart turns around
And walk away.

Love is when you found a new partner
Afterward you sleep and dream of
It is when you have the inward feeling
for someone
when you sit alone quiet and imagine
you are together.
Love is when you miss someone and cry
Kneel down and pray to GOD
it is when you have a taste of one’s
Lip gazing eye to eye and smile.

Love is when you abide deeply
Your like for someone
Compassion beyond sexuality
They said it is blind but yet
A connection from one soul to another.

Love sees a billion miles
it’s paramount
It’s marvelous
It’s a hero
For it conquers all
LOVE is life.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
This is my own way of understanding about love
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Comments

Great theme, one we all can relate
to and have probably written about at
one time or another.
I like the way you've covered the simple
to the complicated but believe the transitions
could be smoothed out with more emphasis
on the changes. Example;
the object of one's liking (the simple)
it's something extreme
something indefinable (the complicated)

For one thing you have the word "something"
in two lines after one another describing the same
"something".
maybe something like;
the object of one's liking
capable of the extremes
something indefinable

Now I'm only making a suggestion and
do not expect or even want you to use
my re-write of your words (I don't like
doing that), I just didn't see any other
way to get across what I was suggesting.
Maybe just to give you something to think
about for future writes.

thank you for sharing, there are some
great lines in this one!

Themoonman SIR, i am ready to learn and i take everything into consideration,thanks for your suggestion and for letting me know more GOD bless you.

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