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We Were Swans Dreaming

Submitted by Kailashana2 on Thu, 2012-07-26 21:08

I wanted you to turn around
but you walked away,
you turned the corner
and disappeared before
I knew your face--the
lines wrinkling your brows
adjacent to
the steel hammer of your eyes
as you broke into laughter
yawning into the rain.

I wanted to feel
the way you wrote your poems
with the left side of your heart
I wanted to hear them all
but the wind wrapped them
up with total darkness,
it was all more than
a dream.

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

Fri, 2012-07-27 22:25

Esker's picture

Delightful read

sometimes Kaila you spellbind me
this is one of them

exhausted
tired from a week
with little sleep

To much internet
work
play
pondering
and now Poets!!

thank you

Sat, 2012-07-28 06:19

Thanks for your words Steven,

Thanks for your words Steven, I always appreciate your poetic offerings. Your talent is beyond amazing.

~A

p.s. Did you notice I had one too many *you's*? lol.

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Sat, 2012-07-28 13:00

Esker's picture

always

there arrive
words

poetry just not like the flow

a magic show
a power place

a memory aloft
and floating
the mirage to keep

This IS one of them

Thank You for your words

Mon, 2012-07-30 22:00

Esker's picture

Swans....

In the late eighties I took a photo Black and white
of a swan on a river

I loved THE SWANS music Love will tear us apart..

I love the BLACK SWAN movie

Kailashana

We drove through the hard farm limits of OHIO
back in 1986/87

oh to live there

but here I am in North Bay Ontario

I loved the rivers
surging beneath the ironwork of steel
the tail fins of aircraft from the airports
and runways
american style

swans on rivers

Tue, 2012-07-31 02:38

Seren's picture

Beautiful I've read this a

Beautiful I've read this a few times it just gets better

Jc

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Tue, 2012-07-31 02:40

Seren's picture

Beautiful it gets better with

Beautiful it gets better with each read

Jc

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Tue, 2012-07-31 04:31

Ian.T's picture

Anna

This is a beautiful piece, there is nothing more to say,
Yours Ian.T

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So find more reasons to believe in others..

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