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The Voice of Christmas Past... Memories of Holidays Past contest

The voice of Christmas Past
keeps whispering in my ear
I don't want to go with him
I'm pulling back in fear

“Come on, he says, for a while
I won't hurt you much”
I just want to show you
you need a Christmas touch”

“Bah, Humbug, leave me be
you're a bit of moldy bread
Just a dream I'm having
I shouldn't eat, then go to bed”

His touch is cold, ice in my heart
hand held in frozen fingers
“See, the school you used to go to
there is a memory that lingers”

Third grade Secret Santa
I remember tears so well
Pick-up sticks for a present
I gave a silver bell

The tears I cried were silent
but the sobs were in my voice
The teacher asked me why
and said, “You should rejoice”

I felt foolish and too proud
so I never said, the reason
But now, I see it better
in that long past Christmas season

I hope that little girl
that was gifted with a bell
rang it every Christmas season
Pick-up sticks are #%&*ing swell!

So lesson-learned, Christmas Past
take me home right now!
It's better giving than receiving
go on, take a bow!

As I sat back to watch the snowfall
my stomach rumbled once or twice
and I thought Christmas Past should stumble
Break his ass upon the ice.

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Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Last few words: 
Stream of consciousness thinking about Christmas Past and Ebenezer Scrooge and this old memory popped up!
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Have our ghosts of christmas past....good story, good imagery with your usual twist of humor. Love it.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

blah! lots I see are now saying
Humbug,
leave...... me be

instead of
let me be

what's really the difference
do enlighten me
Gee

a matter of vernacular. A good question though! ~ Gee.
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and thanks for the appreciation.

I am known for the questions I ask
it helps guys improve///research
and
get GOLD
now I am getting bored and old
soonly may be like ESKER
COLD

Great rhyming schemes! as usual. And funny! Merry Christmas Geezer!
Captain

A Merry Christmas to you too! Have a dram of the Captain for me will you, Captain?
~ Geezer.
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I hate thinking about my past. All scenarios cast me as the jerk, never quite on the mark with anything.
but I suppose that shows some growth and maturity, (that I recognize my past foibles)

nice piece you have written
regards,
Al

ps hope you have liability insurance for broken asses

Al

I rent! And you can't get blood from a stone, I got nothing he can sue me for!
~ Gee.
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