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Using Gravity To Climb
The thing we need
to know
about highs
and lows
is the law of gravity.
Although tv
or an active
imagination
try to convince us
that
spiders
or sharks
or serial killers
are what's gonna kill us,
the statistics say
it's much more likely
to be a big
fall.
Considering
the earth's terrain
and our precarious
emotional landscapes,
we shouldn't
be surprised
at the dangers
of not knowing
what lies ahead of us.
We need the colorful
road signs,
a book
of maps,
that person
who's been there before;
we need someone
who respects
the gravity
of the situation.
There are
the mountain climbers
and parachute jumpers,
who seek the thrill,
with bold or brash
or buoyant hearts.
They seem so high,
so free.
But if we're honest,
most of us
just want to be
safe
on solid ground.
To know,
at whatever level,
the compassion
and companionship
of an experienced
climbing partner.
Comments
raj
Thu, 2018-05-10 06:10
Hi Greg
Good poem inspired by an event mentioned in the title. I liked the way you have used the word "gravity" meaning different in different situations....if i had written this poem I would have titled it "living on the edge"....since the poem talks about how vulnerable we can be...
thanks for posting
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raj (sublime_ocean)
Rula
Thu, 2018-05-10 09:29
Can't really
see the connection between the title, the few words and the poem, but surely got the message at the end. Not v. preachy for me at least.
Enjoyed
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OriginalRhyku
Thu, 2018-05-10 09:36
Greg
Good imagery, especially liked "the earth's terrain
and our precarious emotional landscapes,". Good lesson for the unready, underprepared and overwhelmed traveller who would be better off and alive if they took a selfie at the right time in front of the Travel Channel TV broadcast.
gregwa8
Thu, 2018-05-10 13:56
thanks for the feedback,
thanks for the feedback, everyone. I made a couple changes. felt like the original title was a bit too sensational. filled it out a little bit. I enjoy your sense of humor OriginalRhyku.
IRiz
Thu, 2018-05-10 19:17
Hi Greg,
Hi Greg,
are you a climber?
We climb for the thrill of it and by sharing insanity of the passion making friends.
Yes there is a trust between you and belaying partner but the friendship has bigger umbrella and covers more than one.
IRiz