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Submitted by Seren on Tue, 2023-02-21 11:06

A symphony
of prayer
touches my mind
in the peace
of whispered words
I soothe my heart

some are imprinted
without thought
as filigreed light
warms my soul,
they slip out
as adoration sung
from the heart

in these moments
of reverence
and love
where no pain
can burn
or malice survive

I come as close to heaven
as I can bear to be

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - rough draft
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Not Explicit Content

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Lavender

Tue, 2023-02-21 11:26

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Hello, Jayne,
A beautiful capture of what feels like, to me, a divine phenomenal moment.
L

Seren

Tue, 2023-02-21 11:29

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To say it was profound is an understatement. Thanks so much for reading this one I'm really not sure what to call it.

Thank you for your insight!

Love J x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Lavender

Tue, 2023-02-21 11:33

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Maybe there are no words that fit a suitable title for such a glorious experience...
My heart overflows from this.
Lxx

Seren

Tue, 2023-02-21 11:43

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Hugs

J x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Leslie

Tue, 2023-02-21 11:53

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I loved this also, because it reveals the nature of the HUMAN heart, without compromising the acceptance of divinity!
I feel to say that the poetry that I've read has all been exceptional. This is a fun and safe place to work my feelings out
in a positive way! This is beautiful!

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

Leslie

Tue, 2023-02-21 11:53

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I loved this also, because it reveals the nature of the HUMAN heart, without compromising the acceptance of divinity!
I feel to say that the poetry that I've read has all been exceptional. This is a fun and safe place to work my feelings out
in a positive way! This is beautiful!

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

Leslie

Tue, 2023-02-21 11:53

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I loved this also, because it reveals the nature of the HUMAN heart, without compromising the acceptance of divinity!
I feel to say that the poetry that I've read has all been exceptional. This is a fun and safe place to work my feelings out
in a positive way! This is beautiful!

The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!

Seren

Sat, 2023-02-25 22:15

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I am glad you're feeling comfortable here it should be a place you can come and feel safe to reveal self without fear of anything, I really appreciate your comment I am glad you found something in this to connect to.

Kind Regards Seren

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Geezer

Tue, 2023-02-21 13:36

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like this, one might tend to fall back upon the prayers learned by rote, and somehow retained over years of disuse. A magical moment, captured! ~ Love and higgest bugs, Geez.
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Seren

Sat, 2023-02-25 22:17

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Thanks so much these are moments that are treasured and always tucked into that pocket of memories.

thanks so much for the read and the insight they're always appreciated!

Love and higgliest bugs Sis xox

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Rosewood Apothecary

Tue, 2023-02-21 18:51

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I’m borrowing from Pink Floyd of course. But I thought of the last lines of the “Time” when I read your poem.

Tim

Seren

Sat, 2023-02-25 22:19

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I know that song & actually went and listened to it again when I read your comment,

Thanks for your thoughts they're always appreciated!

Kind Regards Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Seren

Sat, 2023-02-25 22:21

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I am really glad you liked those lines they're also important to me and are the heart of this poem.

thanks for the lovely comment I really appreciate it!

Jayne xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Seren

Sat, 2023-02-25 22:24

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Thank you so much if it brought you peace in any sense or gave you a moment of rest, well, that's why I wrote this one it attempts to describe the indescribable.

Thanks so much for the read its always appreciated.

Hugs Jayne xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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RoseBlack

Wed, 2023-02-22 17:45

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Another brilliant piece! These spiritual moments are so incredible and precious. You did a wonderful job of capturing the feel of that moment.

~RoseBlack~

Seren

Sat, 2023-02-25 22:25

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If I conveyed in anyway the moment, I have shared more than anyone could realise. Thank you so much for your thoughts and the read its always appreciated!

Love and biggest hugs Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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