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Unrequited

Let me gather my thoughts...
they drift around me like
fallen leaves before the rain,
like flyaway cottonwood
stirred by my wandering feet.
I scatter each thought of you
with every bewildered step.
Let me gather my thoughts...

You are in my sunlight.
You are in my silence.
You are in my music,
my poetry,
my rain.

If there could ever be a day
with no thought of you,
I would somehow
miss you still.
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Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

I love it. It’s so inviting. No corrections or suggestions, I just love it.

Tim

Thank you for reading. Your comments mean a lot to me!
L

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How I wish that I had written this! It says everything that one might say to the love of their life. Not a single word out of place.
~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

I find that love is the hardest subject to write about. I'm glad you like this!
Thank you!
L

author comment

hard to write about when writing from the mind of a poet such as yourself, who uses the pen as a conduit for emotions buried
and hidden. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Thank you...
L

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If there could ever be a day
with no thought of you,
I would somehow
miss you still.
nicely slapped......

Thank you very much!
L

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minuscule they must convey................one's mood

I believe I understand what you mean...
L

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Thank you for reading and your generous comment. I appreciate it!
L

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