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'Twas the Eve of All Saints

'Twas the Eve of All Saints
and here in my den
I settled by the fire
with journal and pen.

My tea, sweet with honey,
my wrap, soft as lamb,
my toes, nice and toasty,
my rolls, full of jam.

When what to my
oblivious ears did I hear?
A tap on the window,
a voice filled with cheer.

Then to my horror
my door opened wide
as seven ghostly faces
peeked eagerly inside.

I dashed from my chair,
dove under the bed,
but the faces flew in
right over my head.

Finally one spoke,
"We know that it's late,
but I am Saint Peter
of the Heavenly Gate."

"Tomorrow we feast,
tonight, we all roam.
We've come to visit
your Halloween home."

"Saint Chris of Travels,
Michael of Sword,
Paul the Apostle,
writer of Word."

"Francis of Assisi,
Daniel of Den,
Andrew of Twelve,
fishers of men."

They sailed up the wall,
they soared down the stair,
they pummeled the pillows,
then sat in my chair!

Soon Peter chuckled,
then a whistle he blew.
"Time to roam onward!"
Out the doorway they flew.

I heard him exclaim
as I recovered from fright,
"Happy Eve of All Saints,
and to all a Good Night!"

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Structured: Western
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Last few words: 
To some, Halloween is also known as the Eve of All Saints - All Saints Day practiced by some Catholics and Protestants. I combined both days for a joyful spin.
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I think that you could tighten it up a bit here and there, but Jeez... Nice stuff!
1] Saint Chris of Travels
2] We will forgive the stretch for [sword and word]
3] Andrew of Twelve
Very nice and I wish that I had written it. ~ Geez.
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Great suggestions that I will take! Thank you so much for always helping!
L

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Ha! I have no doubt that your poem will be "spook-tacular" and I can "haunt-ly" wait!
Thanks, Jerry!

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When I was a child, Halloween was a neighborhood event - Mrs. Norcross always made giant popcorn balls, the elderly Clarks always gave out Juicy Fruit gum, Mrs. Dusthimer made caramel apples, and candy bars were HUGE! My siblings and I wore the same costumes several years in a row and didn't think a thing of it. We used pillow cases to gather our treats and traded our favorites when we got home. It was tremendous fun, indeed.
Thank you, Teddy!
L

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Yep, I struggled with that stanza. Your suggestion flows better, sounds better and looks much better.
Thank you very much!
L

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read to the beat of night before christmas this is the perfect and most amusing rhyme I enjoyed it immensely

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Thank you for your wonderful comments!
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