You've successfully created here a kind of "scary mood" , you know the choice of the title, Midnight together with phantasmal world, etc... (not my cup of tea :) ) but I enjoyed the read but left want more. I thought you might like to add another triolet for one or two more details, but this is only my humble opinion.

PS. rhyme scheme of your triolet doesn't follow the ABaAabAB. which is the triolet's rhyme scheme unless I am missing something. I already enjoyed, just thought I'd bring it to your attention if you're not already aware of it.

good edits Mr. Logan. I see the whole poem benefits from the edits.
Don't forget to do the edits for the original submission and choose the name of the contest from the window drop.
Wish you the best.