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Together Forever

With a kiss you say goodbye to me,
finally,
release me from sensual bonds
and extended pleasure,
giving me time to breathe,
thoughtfully,
with a sideways glance I
see you watching me ,
in your mind,
In your arms you're still hold me
close and safe from this world that binds,
holding hands,
playfully ,

You caress my neck and run your hands
through my hair
you say you'll never leave me,
you look into my eyes,
not sure of what stares back at you,
but not taken in by my virtious beguile,
you smile,cautiously,
untrusting of the mischievious exterior,
i kiss you,
to confirm that i love you,
as you hold me throughout the night,
together,
our legs entwined
feeling fonder,
you hands forever wander
my body reacts to your touch,
deeply,fervidly,
til i lose control.
i'm missing you,
i wish i was kissing you,
i sit here dreaming,
eyes beaming,
hoping our day with come soon.

Review Request (Intensity): 
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
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What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
I wrote this about my husband over 8 years ago and forgot to add it to my account x
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Explicit Content

Comments

Awe, so this is one of your older writes, I would use (you) instead of u on the first line, it just makes it more elegant, but that's just my opinion.
I hope your day did come. it's like a love letter. I like happy endings

Thank you...Teddy

Thanks for your feedback hun have a great day

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