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Time
Tic Toc tic tok tic
Seconds pass by each minute
Causing a new day
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Comments
Geezer
Sat, 2023-03-11 15:57
Unless...
this is a different universe, I think that the seconds pass by each minute. Of course, if you want to stick with that statement of minutes pass by, each second? I think that might work. The placing of a comma might make a difference here.
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Clentin
Sat, 2023-03-11 18:21
Thank you yes, I need a
Thank you yes, I need a revision. A simplistic thought on the day we change time
Geezer
Sat, 2023-03-11 18:51
I don't know...
about anyone else, but I hate the change of time every year. Let's just leave it the way it is.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.