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Time

Mystery in a circle of sixty,
You are man’s greatest obsession.
In unseen track you fly,
Lifting light and letting heavy crawl.
Undoubtedly present in every century,
In seconds, minutes and hours,
You turn today to yesterday and tomorrow to now.

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Hello, Oriii,
What a stunning piece. Mysterious and thoughtful, but so obvious and significant. Really like this.
Thank you!
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Thank you Lavender I really appreciate your thought

Oriii

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Thank you Teddy. I'm excited you find it stunning.

Oriii

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The piece takes one deep into self. So nice. Thanks.

Bathe yourself with poetry and let the world go to pieces.

Thank you so much for your thought and advice I do appreciate

Oriii

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your observations on time! I especially enjoyed: "Mystery in a circle of sixty." It sounds so "mysterious!" ~ Geezer.
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Thank you Geezer I am glad u find the poem catchy and mysterious

Oriii

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Brought "Lucy" to mind. One of my favorite films. "Time is the only measurement."
Thanks Oriii,
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Wow I'm so glad you thought of that exceptional movie LUCY while reading my piece... Thank you

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