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Thoughts on Corona virus (Men Vs. Women)

If Corona turns a fashion
that women decide to follow,
will they then maintain the passion
for shopping, today and morrow?
Will they give a safe distance break
or care not to exchange kisses?
They'll sure at least have a hand-shake
-(guess that part no lady misses) :)
But men are much wiser, aren't they?
They care more for all health issues.
They'll just risk going out to pay
for sanitizers and tissues.

But saying women don't care,
Man! "Mum's the word" and be aware!

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Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Last few words: 
Not a sonnet, not a sonnet...just14 lines holding the hope to awake the sleeping muse. Trying to add some sense of humor, don't know how it flows, I'd appreciate letting me know how bad /good this reads
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Comments

The tissue line is spot on! Hmmmm.... Try decides instead of chooses in line 2. And try maintain instead of keep up in line 3. Just a few thoughts

Thanks for the comment Stan! I'm happy to know that bit of humor there works for you.
Thanks for the suggestions too. Edited as advised.
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This can be classed as a sonnet ~ 14 lines and a volta at line 9.
It is what I call a loose sonnet (many people write them these days), with no metrical consistency. Do we really need to count syllables and stress today?
Your rhyming is good ~ abab, cdcd, efef, gg. (I would probably have used 'break' at the end of line 5 instead of 'heck')
The most consistent number of syllables per line here is 8. It would be fairly simple for you to tidy up the remaining lines (7 & 9 syllables) to become 14 lines of 8, and thus consistent.

Let's try that:-

If coron becomes a fashion (8)
Each woman decides to follow, (8)
Will they, then, maintain their passion (8)
For shopping today or morrow? (8)
Will they give safe distance a break (8)
Or care not to exchange kisses? ((8)
They'll sure, at least, have a hand shake (8)
(guess that part no lady misses) (8)
But men are much wiser, aren't they? (8)
They care lots more for health issues (8)
They'll just risk going out to pay (8)
For sanitizers and tissues. (8)

But saying that women don't care, (8)
Man, mum's the word so be aware! (8)

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This is my message to you Rula. It's okay to shoot the messenger if you like.

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Kind regards, Alan
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Your title is a little obscure I think. You could, however, make it a little shorter/easier to read by dropping the second 'are' ~
'Men Are From Mars, Women From Venus'.
Your language use here is okay.
Rhythm etc. see separate critique.
Theme is a contemporary theme ~ I wonder if poetry readers will relate to it in 10 years time (I think not, so will never be a classic ~ sorry).
The beginning is good, you know the story has started. Excellent ending, I think.

In time people won't know what 'coron' is. You could say 'If corona sets the fashion' and still stay with 8 syllables. The word corona is from the Latin for crown so future readers may be confused with corona (crown) in the same breath as fashion (Under the microscope the virus is crown shaped hence 'coronavirus').

Just a few thoughts Rula.

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So many thanks for your comprehensive review. It is much appreciated.
The reason why I said it's not a sonnet is that I used to write some strict sonnets following all its strict rules including not only syllable count but also the strict pentameter. I also conducted a workshop on how to write it here.
This one was as I said just to get back to writing longer pieces.
Still still... I am so grateful to your time and the effort and thoughts you put to improve this piece. I will sure take your points seriously when editing.
Many thanks again.

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Great you're writing but I cannot find a meaning for Coron. Please, do tell..
I mean what Alan wrote makes it so complicated perhaps he's right and you could give it more relativity?
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Sorry that this writing hasn't make much sense. I see now after Alan's review my pitfalls and shall work on them the coming few days.
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including 'coronavirus' into the title, perhaps in brackets, just to explain the theme ~ perhaps:-

Men Are From Mars, Women From Venus (Thoughts on Coronavirus).

I understand what you mean by 'coron', then again we are in the middle of dealing with it. As time goes by coron will mean nothing to future readers. You just need to make it clearer what we are reading about Rula.

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your point Alan and totally agree with you.
Thank you so much for your valuable feedback
Much appreciated!

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Edits done as suggested. Thank you. However, I don't think these difficult days will be easily forgotten in the coming future. Its victims around the world aren't an easy number. Hope though things will be better.
Thank you again for all your valuable reviews.

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from one friend to another.
Please don't forget that this is your poem, your work ~ let no one take it away from you.

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the idiom "mum's the word" is a nice subtle touch from Shakespeare's ink laden quill ~ Henry VI (pt. 2), I think.

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but an American poetess
took pains to teach me
SONNETS with all it's intricacies .

I only cold follow abab cdcd etc 14 lines and finally gg
Well I composed a few
She passed away rather prematurely
left all lessons for me
was she disappointed
I couldn't ask her

She did not leave a sonnet for me

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