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Thought Vs. Doubt
Thoughts are collasal higher then skyscrappers more like sky chasers
If ever evolved into vapor one thought could consume a society and make front page of a paper
WHILE DOUBTS ARE MINISCUE I SHOOT THEM IN THE POCKET LIKE POOL
DOUBT IS LIKE THAT ONE KID WHO NEVER LEAVES THE SIDE OF THE POOL
My thoughts have after thoughts pictures and images that take after art
I ought to put my thoughts on stage I apologize for the sarcasm
They already are They become words performing Center Stage on this page
MY DOUBTS ARE MINIMAL CAUSE THEY ARE SO MINITURE FOR DOUBT THERE IS A CURE
DOUBTS ARE MORE LIKE ALLERGIES ONLY AROUND A FEW TIMES A YEAR I MAY SNEEZE
Wait a second my thoughts are so strong they can merge with Doubt
To become one ...... MAYBE NOT LOOK WHAT'S BEGUN
"LET'S GET READY TO RUMBLE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"
IN THIS CORNER WE HAVE THE PERENIAL POWERHOUSE
WEIGHING IN AT 10 TONS "THE CHAMPION OF CREATIVE ABILITY" THOUGHT!!!!!!!!!!!!
THE CROWD RISES TO IT'S FEET IN AN UPROAR
in the other corner before the announcer can even get a chance to speak his name
in anticipation of his name the crowd begins to boooooooooooo!!!!!!!
weighing in at a half a pound "The Glass Doubt"
Ding.....Ding.....
The THOUGHT remained in the corner and spoke one word
RUN!
doubt did so and got counted out
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Last few words:
This was an assignment for this writing class I'm taking.Hope you enjoy
Editing stage:
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Comments
Ian.T
Thu, 2012-07-12 03:03
N an N
This needs a lot of attention and sorting for form and those capitals can be lost though they are from another voice I am sure there is a way around the plot of the two differing things, I will wait for you to have a look at this for a while and then to come in with an edit or something, Yours Ian.T
PS:-What was the result of the assignment ???
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Numero Negative...
Mon, 2012-07-30 21:12
Thanks for the comment
Sorry for taking so long to comment I've been off Neopoet for awhile,I've actually been performing some of my poetry at this talent showcase on Mondays.Tonight was alright but I'm becoming more comfortable with the crowd everytime I try.My poetry is also confusing to me sometimes,I just let it off the leash and what the final product is.......well it is what it is.It's better when I perform it though,so if your ever in Baltimore check out the Teavolve Open Mic night on Monadays.You can look it up when you get the chance ,Peace and I'll check out some of your work too.
author commentIan.T
Tue, 2012-07-31 04:22
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I would love to be in Baltimore or any place I haven't been to before, I will follow your poetry and see what your base is and maybe confuse you a few times by saying something.
There are many things when reading we have to think of , like where you are when writing your frame of mind and your structured place in the scheme of things so that I can comment with more accuracy, meanwhile that you speak out to your group each Monday is really great and I wish you well in all you do, Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..