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They don’t know you
They won’t see that you're hurting.
They won’t see that you’re crying.
They won’t see that you're in pain.
They won’t see that you’re alone.
They won’t see that you’re stressed.
They won’t see that you’re depressed.
They won't see that you fake a smile.
They won’t see how nice you really are.
They won’t see how tired you are.
They saw all of your failing grades.
They saw all of your flaws.
They saw the mean side of you.
They saw someone that is not good enough for them.
They saw all of your mistakes
Be strong, be who you are!
Let them see that you are someone.
Let them see that you are not who they think you are.
Let them be ashamed that all they said is not true.
They will apologize to you.
They will cry and regret what they did to you.
Be what you want to be.
Love yourself
Take Good Care of Yourself!
Style / type:
Free verse
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How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Sun, 2022-02-06 14:19
.Hello Georgina, welcome to
.Hello Georgina, welcome to Neopoet!
To me, this speaks of bullying, but I don't want to
assume something that I shouldn't.
I normally am not a fan of the repetitive lines
I try to move the words around a little bit and avoid them if I can.
Seeing that you have so many of the lines repeat, it is difficult to do
and just worth remembering. I do like the poem. It tells the story and
makes the point of which; people should not judge others by the bits and pieces
they see. They need to see the whole person and not many people today
want to invest that kind of time. Not that there aren't people capable or willing
They are just fewer and further apart. Good first post and I truly hope that you
will continue to post and let us see your work. Don't be afraid to ask questions
and there are always people willing to help. We want to know you. ~ Geezer.
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Ray Whitaker
Thu, 2022-02-10 13:25
Welcome to the website!
Your poem reminds me of "Imagine" by John Lennon. IMHO, could be set to music easily.
Suggesting personal strength is in order here.that was my feel from it....
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