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I will be a lighthouse
If fog makes you lose your way.

I will be a lifeguard
If waves go over your head and you are too weak to get back up to the surface.

I will be a star
On the darkest, stormiest night when all you can do is stumble.

I will be there.

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Hello BD6, lovely poem. It's powerful. I like your ideas of lighthouse, lifeguard and star. I tweaked one line because it seems too long, IMO. Take or toss. Title, theme, spacing and all else is fine. All the best, Gracy

If waves go over your head and you're too weak to return to the surface.

"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

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