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Telephony:

Without mobile phone
Does not leave you all alone
Just sets a nice tone

Style / type: 
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Moving tribute to an im-mobile time
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https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=N_rTGssTRxg

New York Telephone Conversation
Lou Reed
I was sleeping, gently napping, when I heard the phone
Who is on the other end talking, am I even home
Did you see what she did to him, did you hear what they said
Just a New York conversation, rattling in my head
Oh, my, and what shall we wear
Oh, my, and whop really cares
Just a New York conversation, gossip all of the time
Did you hear who did what to whom, happens all the time
Who has touched and who has dabbled here in the city of shows
Openings, closings, bad repartee, everybody knows
Oh, how sad, why do we call
Oh, I'm glad to hear from you all
I am calling, yes I'm calling just to speak to you
For I know this night will kill me, if I can't be with you
If I can't be with you

cheers,
Jess
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You have been channeling Esker but I get your pertinent message although I would hang up on the conversation midway.

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