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Summer Fun(Contest August)

Wow
Summer again was cold all along
a young chick remains glued to mom's tits he adorns
pair of sibling’s, young ones pull each other’s hair for fun
Mom and pop are sunning at the beach
preparing for another summer’s lasting memorable one (for fun)

young upcoming teens wish to brush lips often
as they cross the permissible age
their love entwined has begun

another couple is smiling
the coming one is kicking her tummy
what a funny feeling

then can't forget aged one's
Grand kids need a change of nappy
granny is happy
grand pa is feeling horny
where have those days gone
when they were under the blankets
at darkness searching

Well all life is lovely since summer has for a while come
Let’s all have our kind of everlasting desirous fun
haven't you yet begun summer's pun

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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ur ABS right as always
lol
stan style

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As Geezer says but maybe you could begin to think about some discipline in your writing and begin with making the lines closer together in length (meter) challenge yourself a bit.
You may like the direction you push yourself in.
Best of luck for you in the competition.
Later,

~Mark~

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an ICU
has hopes of return
I shall apply
my mind
if my synapses remain intact
hopes and thanks
lovedly's sandwich

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like Geezer i enjoyed the theme of the poem
nice one

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

I value your kind visit

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my thanks all
my freestyle poems
just come as visuals mainly in my dreams

I am not much of an articulated poet
so it seems
yet even with neopoets my poems glow with sheen
three contests
one won
one mentioned in honours
and
the best one set technically aside it seems
My Mom's Smiles
As the lady affected me only
NOT INTERNATIONALLY A LADY

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this is an old poem already
posted earlier Kindly note

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sir did u note it

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