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A Study in Pink: Main Thread.

Section One
Victoria is Queen in London Town.
The Empress rules it all with velvet hands.
‘Tis eighteen eighty eight, the city’s brown
with coal and cholera that vex the land.
But down on Fleet Street starts a tale of woe.
Her Highness will learn nothing ‘til too late.
For Secretary Fitzroy’s caught a blow
delivered of a monster’s razor hate.

One might say he has gone and lost his head.
The constabulary, they have lost it too,
but ne’ertheless they say that he is dead
and now they look about to find a clue.
While Fitzroy on the cobblestone won’t care.
He’s lost his mind and therefore cannot think.
The rain pours down; it’s playing truth or dare
and Fitzroy’s blood is washing sickly pink.

Section Two
It's late, yet none could fall asleep
while Mog the monster's free somewhere.
Mystery wraps, the demons weep,
and rain won't wash what has to scare.
No footprints, or bullets are found,
it's Mog for sure, again they face.
the bobbies desperate, they are drowned,
confusion seems would close this case.

Around the corner lives poverty,
but only coal is there to feed.
Someone has to kill the enemy,
before it grows up fast with greed.
So many Mogs behind now stand,
emotions die, and so the brains.
They all are starving to clean the land,
no matter if considered insane.

Section Three
Anabel Lee,
she chose her name carefully.
Cut her hair, painted her face,
the never ending battle with identity.
Arriving in London,one dreary morning,
bareback and alone, she landed.
Her un-ladylike appearance subject to scorn.
Another chapter in her story was born.

She began serving beer at the Blue Boy Tavern,
befriending an outcast,than an unknown stranger.
Friendships that would lead to nothing but danger.
Thirty years old and never been wed
caused the town gossips to turn their head.
Oh well, let them say what had to be said.
Anabel didn't give a damn, ignorance was bliss.
For now her secret, would stay well hid.

Section Four
The owner of the the Grand Royale Hotel was fuming
His business rival, John Creel, has been spreading rumours
sending his worried customers packing and leaving,
fearing the lies about a non-existing curse.
Only a few refused to believe the nonsense remained.
Roy Mackwill was grateful but if this continues,
his hotel business's reputation will be flushed into the drain
unless he decided quickly what to do

He cannot just leave it to the Scotland Yard detectives.
None of their assurances could ease his troubled heart
thus he advertised in the local paper, offering incentives
to anyone who could help solve the case in all haste
knowing fully well that his rival will do his best
to see him fail and his livelihood ruined
but he was ready to face this test
and he was sure he could win

Section five
The scene is rather grisly.
Hanging around on Fleet Street is risky.
A detective by nature, Urilla said a quick prayer,
then proceeded to look for clues and evidence.
Fitzroy's body lay lifeless, red blood ran pink in the rain.
He was a man six feet tall, dark and handsome, lived a modest life.
His tan shirt, grey pant covered in blood.
He never lived to see his lady friend's romantic surprise. He lay dead, headless.

Fitzroy's body chalked out on the cement.
Urilla, dressed in mauve and pink,
bend over to study the drawing.
Gum stuck on her Mauve heels is evidence.
After much fact checking and note taking she goes home to create a profile.
At home, a small penthouse, she's fresh and relaxed studying her reports.
Her thoughts race absorbing facts found near the crime scene.
Profiling all possible suspects she makes her case.

Section six
Detecting suspects and divining truth
is what Guy has done since his youth
Making sense of all the facts
figuring out most murderous acts
The latest test of his detecting skill
is a most disturbing kind of kill
A headless body has been found
lying on the blood-soaked ground

No head is found on the street named Fleet
No clues to make the mystery neat
A. Fitzroy behind the 'Grand'
struck down and out by unknown hand
Who can say what any have seen?
Is there witness? There may have been!
Detective French knows that he must walk
The street is usually, where there is talk

Section seven
Mog floats the night, mist filled and dead
savouring *Jack's last fulsome taste
seeking someone to fill Jack's stead.
Mog drifts slowly, there is no haste.
Nearby it hears a scream and gurgle
decides to waft toward the scene
(did someone die in midst of burgle?)
The "taste” of fear is coloured green.

By the time I get to the fear's source
the well of rage is fleeing fast
and a crowd is gathering, of course.
Diverse emotions now are cast
There are five or six hosts here,
a pool of blood steaming and slick
All emotions not just fear,
which one to pick, which one to pick?

Section eight
I found Winter in a Putney bar, a limping man with a nasty scar
A swarthy tone from many a race, a killer by the look of his face
He went by the name of Arnold Winter a knife man so I was told
Told him of Mackwill, he mouthed a curse, said leave it to me.
I paid him to cause a to-do, he said that he would see it through
It cost me a guinea or two, but it’s worth it to see him seen to.
He was smeared over the telegraphs page, loved to see his rage
I notice in the financial times column, his hotel is now bottom.

Damn that man I didn’t realize the trouble he’d cause
A man with his head severed, and many people with fears
I hurried to the place we met to see what was going on.
He said “Sorry Guv I went there but I was much too late”
A murder out back, peelers were there, so I just turned away
I have spent your money he said, already one man dead
I think that a girl saw me loitering there, I shall hide don’t fear.
He smiled dribbling his swill, I left to cause Mackwill more ill.

Section nine
Well you guys hold your horses
As I, Milford Lowe settle my cigar.
You can call me Millie, twill be okay
Setting my eyes on ma lady's bosom
Yeah I saw everything..
Hold on hold on, don't be impatient
Let me enjoy a puff, then I'll tell you everything
Now hear me, secretly and keep it to yourself only.

Fitzroy's body lay lifeless, red blood ran pink in the rain.
Without a head! Ah!!! Those guys in a coach threw a body out
There without a head, Fizzy’s body, who was so dead .
The one you all are running about is no amateur ,
I saw everything from behind the Fleet Street trees
You wanna proof? Yah I know your ilk
I got my bouncer chasing, here have a look at this blade.
This one who, was kidnapped twas Fitzroy .Just think damn it!

Section ten
Mackwill paces rapidly about his cold boudoir.
He’s found a thing tucked deep inside his oak and steel armoire.
How it got there he can’t guess spite knowing what it is.
Now he has a problem more pronounced than just his biz.

‘Her thoughts race absorbing facts found near the crime scene.’

“Guy, I want the girl, the barmaid seen, you know of whom I speak.
She saw a thing I want to know and know before she leaks
the secrets to the press and all, but here’s the other pain:
the trail of blood in the hotel come in from out the rain”

“Where did it lead?” Guy queries her. “Where did the blood trail lead?”
“It dried away inside the joint, just past ‘The Grill and Mead’.”
“Then we must search the Hotel grounds ‘til find the blood again.
The carpets will be wet you see. The steps in from the rain”.

And Mackwill stares upon the thing not knowing how it came.
He can’t recall a single thing from last night’s gory maim.
Now what do? How can he tell his all too fearful wife.
He hides his eyes and looks not on the bloodied murder knife.

Section eleven
"Bring on all the suspects now and haste,
ordered Maure, we have no much time to waste."
" We've already some valid clues, and
I've got reports 'bout a wife's abuse!!"

Now Macwill couldn't find his wife, his fears grow,
and thought she could give his business-life a blow.

"If cops find out what's going in the bed
they sure would charge me of Fitzory's head."

"I suspected the relation of
Macwill and Flitz, and that was enough
to give Mac a reason to end his life."
Anable said it all, she described a knife,
"I saw it in his pocket, last night at the bar"
Yet I never thought it'll go that far."

Here Here", thought Maure "someone's lying
And is that why Mac's wife is seen there crying?" "

Section twelve
Closing time at the tavern, Guy French is about.
Questioning Anabel Lee, she saw something, no doubt.
"How do you know Fitzroy," He thundered, as she cleaned up the bar.
Rolling her eyes, Anabel smiled. "Wouldn't you like to know?"

Losing his patience, Guy took a deep breath.
"You're new here, I checked you out. Funny thing is, no one knows what you're about."
Anabel shrugged. "So that makes me a killer? Mystery doesn't give you mens rea."
"Someone said that you saw the knife. Were you there when Fitzroy lost his life?"

"You're a detective, my dear French, why bother asking? You've already established reasonable doubt."
Shaking his head, Guy pulled out the stops. "Your obstinance leaves me no choice. I have to call you out."
"Call me what?" Anabel sneered as she shut off the lights. "Go home, Detective. It's been a long night."
"What happened in your home town, Anabel Lee? Why did you leave so fast? You can't outrun the past!"

Anabel stepped in front of Guy, standing chest to chest. "I had drinks with Fitzroy before he breathed his last."
"Now we're getting somewhere." Guy said with a grin. "Did something go wrong?"
She shook her head as Guy continued. "Was he more than just a friend?"
"That's impossible. I don't go that route. If you really must know, my name used to be Jim."

Section Thirteen
Guy French narrowed his eyes
while Anabel stared back at him
"Tell me what happened that night."
She snorted and said nothing.
"Why aren't you answering me?"
" I prefer to stay alive, Detective."
The truth will be the death of me.
You know nothing about the forces at play."

Guy French felt as if they were being watched.
He feigned a bout of coughing
as he stole a glance at the window.
He caught sight of the man in the shadow
and ran out of the bar shouting.
The panicked man started running
while Guy French gave chase
Stop that man!" he cried out but none came to his aid.

Section fourteen
After Guy French talked with Anabel she revealed a clue, not mentioned.
Mackwill's behavior started me wondering more about the Mog
and Guy French's man chase, he said, resembled Fritzroy.

The Mog rumors made me wonder its existence because
Mackwill still has no memory of that rainy night with murder weapon in his pocket.
I talked to Mackwill's wife and his secret came to light when she left their home.

She found Fritzroy's favorite gum, Tutti-Frutti in his pocket.
Annabel, the unknown witness, saw it all when she, aka Jim,
caught Mackwell and Fritzroy's intimate moment.
They previously dumped the headless body on
Fleet Street behind Mackwell's restaurant.

John Creel's hotel room is where those two embraced their love.
There's a stench in the air. John Creel's customer's head she found.
Anabel covered her mouth to silence her scream, ran in fear.
Fritzroy waited for her to come. She left the scene undetected.

Section fifteen
What horror was this, that chased him so?
Nothing he could see

Did he really want to know?
“What is after me?”

Stay quiet now, use no lights
Locked doors and keeping still

Trembling now in the darkest night
Staying sane by force of will

Black his thoughts, of deep despair
He knows not where to turn

Evil stalks; follows everywhere
Red eyes flame and burn

Fearing for his very life
He hides in darkened room

Wishing for, more than a knife
Fitzy waiting for his doom

Section sixteen
Drifting toward the murder scene
I sense a hot bar of emotions there
but one host has already left the scene
yet tastes are teeming everywhere.

But one person is two it seems
and thus has a more enticing flavor
a divided host with ragged seams
this is the one which I will favor

So I dive into his mind
and find his name is Annabel...
........
My eyes just can't stop watching the body
then they blur with fright and pain
and my true self is shoved aside
I feel that I have gone insane.

Some deamon is now in control
it makes me smile an evil smile
then sets me running after another
I catch up in less than a half mile..........

Section seventeen
I Creel relates

A sultry character who didn’t give his name
Asked me if he could join in with my game
I told him what I knew so far of my hate for Mackwill
He smiled at me and said there are a few things to do
His friend Fitzroy wanted some time to flee with his new find
I asked what, he said don’t you know, Mackwill’s wife was why.
We planted a body behind his hotel without a head so they can’t tell
A friend I know at a local morgue gave it to me free.

I asked the man what of the head, he said buried in Tyburn’s bed.
Why do you want to hurt Mackwill as a few of us do?
He told me a story not sure if it’s true, so he may add it to my tale.
That’s Mackwill fate, its great fun for me to see another with hate
Those detectives haven’t got a clue, the knife, and blood I left a few.
I think that a whisper in a detective’s ear, will make it clear.
My new friend, I found with the same hatred of that Hotel
I shall ask him to relate his side of the tale.

Section eighteen
I saw the telegraph, wow they got it all awry
poor Mackwill I ain’t sure did no wrong, should I feel sorry
there seems to be more of a conspiracy.
they have asked me to go into the darn Police
but they, big balls, haven't sent a comfy carriage for me
through my mist of wine I could have been a bit fuzzy
yes coach and horses, big guys numbered three, well maybe
yeah they threw a body out onto the bloody cobble
that night the mist never cleared, it may have had me wobble

Now in retrospect ma minds clear, there is no fog
you should blame a man possessed by Mog
I have often heard about of this skulking filth
damn that Ripper and others just held their sway.
dispatching all of a sudden that came their way
In the eerie places of old London streets, in town
all left before the darkness came down
may be tis all, I still think, a myth to scare you all

Section eighteen A
Detective French sat in the pub
Down in his cups again
Seems he had, it all wrong this time
As he looked out at the rain

This Mog; it was, a nasty beast
No body to arrest
Just the spirit of an evil thing
My God, it was a mess!

Guy reflected that it surely was
Time for him to go
Retiring now, seemed the thing to do
He'd gotten way too slow

The things he'd thought were writ in stone
Now just didn't apply
Spirits, madness and crazy things
Were too much for this detective Guy

Through a window blurred with waves of rain
He saw a familiar face
No... he thought, I must be wrong
It was a long forgotten case

I'll just finish up my drink and leave
It's getting late and dark
I'll take my time in getting home
Go the long way, through the park

DETECTIVE FRENCH DISAPPEARS!
No clues to where he's at
Just his foot-prints on the path
And his bloody hat...

Section Nineteen
He’s run and Hell has chased him far and now into a cramped and lonely room.
“Why run you so?” the Demon asks, “I’ve nothing different than I had before.”
Detective French has caught them up and wonders what indeed he’s caught.
And then the manly girl turns round and French knows he’s the Devil caught.

Far faster than the eyes can see, the girl takes claim of Fitzroy’s knife
and with a flick It gives it to the doomed detective’s vuln’rable heart.
The red in Jim’s cold eyes is gone and now it warms Guy French’s face.
The doomed man grins before he fails and mumbles through a blood filled mouth.

“A pity I must leave afore he dies, but elsewise I would take the loss quite hard.”
And now it’s Anabel who speaks again to Fitzroy cowered up against the wall.
“Good bye dear man, but you have been great fun.”
And then full rein Mog gives to Anabel who laughs with eyes of red.

Poor Fitzroy struggles, but it’s all in vain.
His eyes glow red the instant ere he dies.
Then Anabel turns round bewildered out her mind.
Urilla, eyes aglow, is grinning, laughing feeding off the night,

then spits another piece of fruit laced gum.

Section twenty
"think quickly Annabel"
she kept saying to herself
as red glows from Urilla's eyes.
"those eyes hold the monster's rage."

Annable snatched a bottle
and hit onto the head
"the detective immediately died.
Mog's paralyzed then died too.

In no time she raced the wind
holding Urilla's body on her horse
to meet Arnold Winter
somewhere near the factory.
Let's slay as usual the head
and throw where never found
If they are ever found
the cops think it's Mog the serial killer.

Section twenty one
What a night! Riding off with Urilla's body
Beneath a blood drenched sky!
The demon was upon us or so they thought
Imaginations really played their part!

They never knew it was me, too busy worrying about my sexuality.
Back home, I was James Alastair, beloved detective and friend
When the bodies showed up, the Headless Horseman was born
Investigating my own crime scenes.
I was the one, feared almost as much as the Ripper himself.

Met Arnold down near the river bed, blade and bucket in his hand.
Time for another rousing game of "off with her head!"
The perfect little trophy, propped up on a stick,
To join the others forever, my perfect little clique!

Such a shame good old Arnold was ready to crack
Really broke my heart to snap his neck.
Took his place with all the rest, .
Lined up in the cellar, where no one would suspect!

Standing up at attention, the heads await my instruction!
Lips stitched tight, so they won't make a sound!
Oh Guy, it was a shame but you were digging too deep!
Eyes pinned open with needles so they have to look into my desires!

Alabaster, you perverted bastard with your sexual fantasies
Maybe in another life, had I really been a woman
Urilla, my beauty, you now join the group
I couldn't have you in life, but I will forever in death

Section twenty two
Laughing Annabel did not see Urilla's twitching fingers
Mog will never be defeated so easily after surviving for many years
it is easy for him to enter or leave a host's body
before death claims the human soul for eternity

The deranged killer learns the truth when Mog strike
with a great roar, he impaled her back and her body grow slack
Annabel's corpse fell off the horse, a fitting end for a killer without remorse
Mog left Urilla's body to hunt anew seeking another who's just as cruel

While in his grand hotel, Mackwill's mind snapped
his attempt to clear his name reached a dead end
he hatched a plan to burn down his hotel
if others think him dead, he'll be free once again

He looked out of the window and saw John Creel's hotel
the man who has been his nemesis will soon feel his wraith
At that moment John Creel was whistling a joyful tune,
unaware that Mackwill is planning his doom.

Section twenty three
Stars white clouds vivid visions, twitching fingers Mog alive. On horseback Urilla gallops. Her black hair sways in the wind. Red eyed and conscious Mog strengthens her unaware. she impales Annabel takes her trophy of heads at foot of the mountain her secret uncovered. Game over "off with their heads" has come to an end

Mog for centuries, knower of secrets. Annabel fooled many her true anonymity. Detective French great
detective work, uncovered her lies. She killed Fitzroy once partner of her schemes ran. He saw Mog in her eyes when speaking with French at the tavern. His relentless digging into her past infuriated her. Poor Fitzroy Annabel killed him too.
Partners in crime, Annabel and Fitzroy killed Arnold Winter. Fitzroy's head in a cellar his body Fleet Street. Annabel again a loner.

Macwell wife is gone, who knows where? His hotel has no customers. Rumors of Mog done its damage. John Creel's business booms send rage through Macwell. Seek to purchase Macwell livelihood for cheap. Macwell complete breakdown, eyes glowing red, John Creel demise in his sights.
Milford Lowe rich guy, witness murder thinks it's conspiracy tells what he see. Suddenly, Urilla appeared with heads in tote.Investigation Annabel's fetish for heads underway.

Urilla's inner faith, served her well. Red, high heel, red, silk, dress does her justice.Whoosh on the horse she jump, rode off toward her home dripping blood from her long hair.
Fight brewing between Macwell and Creel. Creel's prosperity looming doom. Macwell pissed Mog sees his rage. Suddenly, Urilla jerks uncontrollably makes it home. At hospital she rest in a coma. And Mog races through time to new feeding ground of blood and gore.

Section twenty four
Mog laughs as it leaves Annabel
leaving "her" to stew in hell
in never ending insanity
Annabel's laugh holds naught but glee.

So it rides night fog again
having become bored of murder's sin
now in search of something new
perhaps another place will do.

The mists flow slowly toward the docks
where ships ride with ropy shocks
and sees a strange type of new man
It takes a taste and makes its plan.

For this man is a Mohican
an Indian from the new land
So Mog dives in an and takes control
as dawn breaks and church bells toll

Mog leaves her handiwork behind
to its departure all are blind
Where Mog has decided to go
she'll soon be known as Wendigo

Section twenty five
John Creel-Mog, here??

Way back in time before the streets of London town
They murdered me and placed me deep underground
Then in 1860’s as they built their railway that was the tube
They disturbed my grave, now you see how they set me free.

First of my new mentors that took me out of that hellish hole
Was a man with a pick who didn’t know, what he had done?
I was kind to him as he was the first,
Red eyed and crazy subduing my thirst
I maimed him in my violent rage, I only took his eyes.

I was unusually calm now you all know it was me the Mog.
Spawned of the mystics past strange times, distant curses.
Wanted me to kill at their command, now I roam the land.
Little did they know what they had made, as time passed by?

I am free to roam again, you know the list of the slain
The odd lady that took me for a fool, fell to my slashing tool.
I will let you now think on, as to what has just transpired.
People killed for what you all thought was greed or wealth.

I just love the feelings in me on my killing spree.
Creel, Mog, the same, the police will wish they never came.
To my field of blood, more heads will go before the dawn.

Fitzroy, idiot, you couldn't flee, I controlled Annabel you see.
It was so easy to temp you, then young Urilla didn’t do well.
I must return to my real self, the physical one that I am now.
You all do as you wish, whatever you do, I shall still live on.
I had a small break you see, down to the docks to cause misery. (Ref Stan's write)

Mackwill is due to visit me at the hour of three for me to play.
Don’t try to save his ass, he belongs to me, then I shall rest
There is nothing on your earthly ways you can't beat me now.
I shall return John Creel to you, so the gallows can bend for his just end.

Trust me, Mog will be here for eternities end, and more.
I am now going to visit the new worlds shore.
Forgive me London, I know you set me free
Fresh blood of a place, they shout of Liberty, beckons me.

Section twenty six

It didn’t take me long after leaving Creel behind
I eaves dropped at a few partly open hotel doors
yeah waited a while and watched for a host
to take me to America's wildest shores,

Ah! A rich man and his sweetest whore

I imagined I’d like to join in the fun
I entered the richest bum, as he played his game
his eyes turned bloody red not seen before
by the woman of the street, dirty littlest whore.

She gasped as if she reached her orgasmic heights
t'was the only energy and the way of Mog’s nights
he could last for hours and hours but time was no more
the woman screamed and ran naked out of the door.

Richard Dean was aghast, he hadn't realized what was going on
his inner coolest peace by now had been erased
as his trip to the Americas was early next day
to the port by carriage he quickly made his way.

well I bid you all a very fine, fare ye well,
yeah, the Dean had arranged passage with a spritlily gal
so naturally off I went to meet my companion for the voyage
I hope that by now you can clear up the carnage,

Resolution
1888 November 22nd A news report that may be true
The daily Telegraph’s story came out of the blue
It told the story of many killings from angles new
Of a creature not found, yet heard of in olden day tales
That was roaming the streets of London town in the 1860’s
It transpired that two hotels near to the old Tyburn gate
One owned by a Mr. T Mackwill a thriving concern until,
A greedy Hotel owner who went by the name of J Creel
Wanted to take his business no matter what ill.
It has been reported that it was out and out war.
Both hoteliers hurting each other to even the score
They didn’t know they had awoken a creature there.
Joining them, we surmised a creature planned their demise.
It is not clear as to what happened but many it did scare
A Mog they said from the days of old fed on their fear.
A story without proof you may all say, even to this day.
A Mog was a horror story from many years very long ago
A reenacted tortured spirit of evil, buried deep in the past.
We can only guess at what would happen if he was freed at last
The blame for all the terrible goings on, set at the door of Creel.

The Telegraph..
In Mr. J Creels hotel the police found the dismembered body of a man.
This investigation was on going, the police also lost a man or two during this inquiry.
The circumstances of their deaths has shook the nation.
Also the untimely deaths of two ladies that have yet to be identified
Now the blame for all the goings on, maybe set to rights.
All the folks that you ask tell a story of a tormented creature
Myth or creatures from a long time gone, must be wrong
An excuse from a few that would make us believe true.
I will leave the conclusions up to you.
Yesterday throughout the country the Telegraph lines sang.
Today I shall try and get a better police report if I can.
Reported in the last hour or so, our reporter on the scene.
Mrs. E Mackwill, has been seen alighting from the York coach.
We will try to give you her story in tomorrow’s issue.

J Sparrow (London Telegraph News)

Epilogue Number One
(Allow me if you will, indulge me for just a few, while I tell you of my story, while I sing you my sick, sad song. Terrytown thought I was gone but in reality I had moved on. Only to be found by something more powerful than myself. It was an end to the means, I mean, nothing lasts forever. Now I sit, alone as ever, here in limbo. The Afterlife, it isn't so grand. Listen to me, one more time, before they take me below. This is my final testament, the final word of a serial killer...)

Once upon a time, there was a boy named James
James wanted to be like all the other boys but couldn't
His mother was a whore, dragged men in and out
Beat James whenever he would scream and shout
His father was a deadbeat, disappeared before his birth
And so the poor little boy was left to fend for himself

Years went by and it was apparent James was different
Filled with hate and rage, rejected by his so called clan
He had a taste for blood, a scorned son's revenge
She would be his first victim, mommy dearest, at the tender age of ten
No one knew them as friends, so it took a while to find
James soaked in his mother's blood, her head upon a broomstick, so he could see her eyes.

The police said they would help him, someone must have broken in
Must have been a "john" or a vagabond, couldn't have been her little man
Went home with an officer, had a decent life, became a man
With badge in hand, he became one of them, tried to suppress the darkness within
Married the preacher's daughter, was happy until she began to sin
Then it happened, the switch was flipped, James glanced around, eyes glowing red

Poor Mrs. Alastair and her lover, found by her detective husband, bludgeoned to death
Heads propped upon a broomstick, must have been the killer from his childhood, James proclaimed
The MO was the same, just a different house with different players, breaking and entering, overkill
There was a killer on the loose, the newspaper boys screamed, lock your doors, hide your children
A horse, covered in Mrs. Alastair's blood, found by the river bed, near the body, who was missing her head
The Headless Horseman, as he became known, had struck again.
Now more feared than the Ripper himself, creeping into houses of women of ill repute.

Beating them until they begged for mercy, grinning as he pinned their eyes with needles
He wanted them to see his face, wanted them to know that someone knew what they had done
Stitched their lips so they couldn't make a sound, then "off with their head," he laughed out loud
He was the vigilante, the righter of the wrongs, kept their heads as trophies, the perfect company
Sometimes James would talk to them and occasionally they would answer back, dancing upon their sticks
They were his special friends.....

The detectives for each case began to put two and two together, how James Alastair always seemed to appear.
He knew more about the crimes than anyone investigating, enough to begin to raise suspicion.
James knew his time was almost up, it was time to get out, tossed a dead hobo inside.
The mirror in the bathroom, surely it must be lying, with the hair and makeup, he saw his mother's face.
Cracking the glass, he grabbed what little he had. Got a horse from the barn and lit the house on fire.
Thus Anabel Sumner was born.

James Alastair was no more, his colleagues pulled his "body" from the carnage.
They weren't all that surprised, pulling charred head after head from the basement
There was always something different about James, they just couldn't figure it.

(Death, it was more beautiful than I ever could have imagined. The impaling didn't hurt. I felt my demons leave my body as I fell of my horse. But I always thought death was beautiful. It ridded the world of its trash. But the beauty was short lived and now it is time that I pay for all of my sins. The people I tried to vanquish are here waiting for me. Now I must face them for all eternity!)

Epilogue number two
Life has never been
for me a piece of cake,
nor for all the homeless
in the Victorian age.
Working in the coal mines
for almost the whole day
which has been my cell; a hell.
I thought that poverty's
the real monster; a Mog
that Victoria the queen
never heard of afore.
We've been ganging every night
looking for the next prey, together
with Mog, and the heartless Anable.
There we left many slain- headless
(those who have always been
a body without a soul.)

Epilogue number three
As the fire from Macwill hotel spreads,
shouts and screams filled the air
the people of London strived to save the city,
while he enters John Creel's hotel to confront his enemy.

Armed with a knife, John Creel moved with great speed
Macwill saw the man's eyes turned red but he felt no fear
even when his wounds started to bleed aplenty
he died and Mog left John Creel's body.

What of Mackwill's wife who is at the harbour,
waiting to elope with her lover?
when he did not return, she was heartbroken
and tried to end her life out of despair
but a priest saved her and later she became
one of God's servants, dedicating her life to glorify His Name

Urilla dragged herself from sickbed
to strive to protect people from the fire
with her aid, many lives were saved
she lived to continue her passion for many years.

Epilogue four

Epilogue 4
This has been a trying time
many heads without bodies in the city
and horrid rumors of Mog intertwine
Macwell's hotel up in flames
murdered by Creel lacking pity.

Creel's murder trial is underway
in court I’ve testified under oath
evidence and facts on display
in an affidavit I wrote.

Off on an adventurous trip to America
to write a memoir this horror—murder case
had enough of this town and its headless murders
Sure glad mog scare was just a hoax to save face

In the stockyard of London
now back to normal.

Have a Cheerful Day

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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
Here is the poem as a whole. As contributors add their sections and are critiqued, they will then be moved here that we may read the poem in its entirety as it stands at any given moment. Section One has been critiqued, I have not edited and have moved it. Rula's must be critiqued. When she is satisfied, it will be added to the bottom. Then Carrie and so on.
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Wonderful

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This makes more sense. I was wondering how you are planning to piece the individual build ups together. For the first time I see "pink" appear in the verse which gives some credibility to the "pink" in the title. Having said that, I personally feel "Mystery" should appear somewhere in the title instead of "study". Perhaps "Mystery of Pink Blood"...

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Written. Now, we have to see how you portray the now dead victim throughout the rest of the tale. I think he should be a spirit or ghost looking down, telling his side of the story. It would certainly bring in the element of mystery and creepy. ...

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

is a play on words. The first Sherlock Holmes was entitled "A Study in Scarlett". Cheap, I know, but what can I say? I'm a fan.

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U think it is ok.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Limited time to post so here goes:

Mog floats the night, mist filled and dead
savoring *Jack's last fulsome taste
seeking one to fill Jack's stead.
Mog drifts slowly, there's no haste.

Nearby it hears a scream and gurgle
decides waft toward the scene
(did someone die in midst of burgle?)
The "taste " of fear is colored green.

By the time I get to the fear's source
the well of rage is fleeing fast
and a crowd is gathering, of course.
I taste emotions being cast.

There are five or six hosts here,
a pool of blood steaming and slick
and a hot bar of emotions near.
Which one to pick, which one to pick?

*
"Jack" is Jack the ripper. Mog's last host who he'd driven insane and who has just died from syphillis

Just realized I posted this at wrong place but also have to leave keyboard now.....damn!

Format not according to guidelines
8 lines 2 stanzas 16 total lines

Mog floats the night, mist filled and dead
savoring *Jack's last fulsome taste
seeking one to fill Jack's stead.
Mog drifts slowly, there's no haste.
Nearby it hears a scream and gurgle
decides waft toward the scene
(did someone die in midst of burgle?)
The "taste " of fear is colored green.

By the time I get to the fear's source
the well of rage is fleeing fast
and a crowd is gathering, of course.
I taste emotions being cast.
There are five or six hosts here,
a pool of blood steaming and slick
and a hot bar of emotions near.
Which one to pick, which one to pick?

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What is wrong with it? I'm not too worried about stanza breaks as long as it's no longer than sixteen lines. How did he go wrong?

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Technically he didnt go wrong. You set yours up in 8 lines two stanza. I think all poems should follow in sync.

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post it as a poem. In the meantime, everyone can critique right here. It seems simpler that way. Ian is up. Then Loved.

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You prefer 2 stanzas of 8 lines apiece?

Yes, two stanzas is best bc consistency in format is good for flow and readability. Like a book, text format is not change.

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Probably don't mind if line breaks are different as long as no one hogs by using more than sixteen lines. Because of the different conversations going on, my next go round is forced into quatrains (four stanzas of four lines each). It was the only way I could do it and still have the conversations the way I did.
I'm mostly concerned with the limitation of sixteen lines.
Sorry for the confusion. This is still experimental, you know.

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Four stanzas four lines each. I tend to stick format.

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In the future I will use 8 line stanzas just to keep things uniform

Wesley the boss here, he said 4 stanza 4 lines. Im good wit that, I just need to be organized to function properly. I guess in ways most ppl never consider, I'm excessive one way or the other way. There is no middle and that's something most around me find problematic. But I'm flexible and bendable humbly. Lol

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Well you guys hold your horses
As I, Milford Lowe settle my cigar.
You can call me Millie, twill be okay
Setting my eyes on ma lady's bosom
Yeah I saw everything..
Hold on hold on, don't be impatient
Let me enjoy a puff, then I'll tell you everything
Now hear me, secretly and keep it to yourself only.

Fitzroy's body lay lifeless, red blood ran pink in the rain.
Without a head! Ah!!! Those guys in a coach threw a body out
There without a head, Fizzy’s body, who was so dead .
The one you all are running about is no amateur ,
I saw everything from behind the Fleet Street trees
You wanna proof? Yah I know your ilk
I got my bouncer chasing, here have a look at this blade.
This one who, was kidnapped twas Fitzroy .Just think damn it!

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next action by me now??

Alid, then Barbara, then Geez, then Stan, then Ian, then you. Can't wait huh?

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for such an opportunity
thou givest out of so many

I asked Stan how many???
He said he will have to find it...
Well must be at least 12 of neopoet
I am 9th only

Section 12

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

with section eleven sir

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done editing mine. you can put up section 12 when you get a chance

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

I have a suggestion. How about adding a Prologue as curtain raiser in the main body of this thread, the background of this drama, which I remember you had done during kick off of this WS? I think that would help Members who are not participating in this WS a better handle / comprehension and thereby enjoy the Drama unfolding in verses. Just a thought for your evaluation. It would particularly be significant when the WS eventually comes to a close.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

a comment to keep this near top of stream

Even when you're not moderating.

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only a moderate moderator lmao.........stan

Did you know a modern moderator, moderates in moderation, moderately ..
La, La, Yours, J Sparrow.
I's going into Yenti's cave..

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I is in here, would you believe it, a picture of George V1 on the wall, and Vera Lynn with Eve Boswell.
I wonder if you know Eve Boswell?
Perfumed candles and a few old manuscripts on an old table, made from a large piece of wood, Ink and quills with some nasty powder, I put some on my face it just itched, one of those old wig stands in the alcove over there by the entrance, good grief like walking back a century or so, yet a tin of tea bags all different, with gold lettering on the tea caddy saying,
"Come sup with me there is much to think on"
At the back is another part where tapestries hang from way back depicting the journey of man.
Behind them are separate sleeping platforms, there a note on the wall which says, there is much to think, as we need no sleep.
I suppose the beds are just symbolic, no place for food either as I am sure he told me that there was no need to eat.
I shall make a cup of tea and wait for his/her return, or did you not know that there is no gender here, all energy is of the same lilt just the individual patterns that makes the individual.
Take care young Horse whisperer,
Yours J Sparrow

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No longer relevant,
Thanks, yours Ian.T

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Jess is feeling bad again. He will not be participating.

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As you haven't touched the original all is OK with my original write now that Jess has withdrawn, Yours Ian.T

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Can all apply for a PHD in poetry
and share the booty
by cutting the degree
into pieces
give me a slice too
for my free style
will you

If we thought this tale was twisted as is... well.
Anyway, there is good news on the Jess front. He has agreed, when he is feeling better, to run a workshop on "The Limerick".
He's rather enthusiastic about it too.
I'm excited.
He's going to discuss the limerick as a form and not necessarily as a baudy, disgusting thing (even though that is the common nature of the form). This means Mr. Prude (myself) will be allowed to participate. To be honest I don't think I could write a sexual poem much less read it when I was done.

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You couldn't write a sexual poem? Aren't you always challenging us to try new things, come out of our comfort zone, even if it hits on one of our weaknesses. So now I challenge you. It doesn't have to be filthy or disgusting. It can be beautiful and innocent. Sex isn't always dirty. Write us a poem of that nature. Come out of your comfort zone. Be bold, dazzles us with charm and romance. :)

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

ANY NUMBER OF SEXUAL poems you want
just wink i shall post as many

one i was about to post
but for the one poem 24 hour anchor ......

do you know how many poets r on neopoet
well no one knows
and all don't read all
why the ban i wonder
only heaven and jess know

let others enjoy
before neo crashed over her 200 read me
now hardly anyone may be Ian only

I will write a romantic, mildly sexual limerick. It will be hard for me, but I will succeed. I don't usually take dares, but poetry is different. Challenges, thrown gauntlets, are to be taken seriously.
Wish me luck.
A chief should never ask his braves to do what he is unwilling to do.

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I know you will do well. I wish you the best of luck but I am sure you will do fine. You rise to every challenge and your poetry usually blows my mind. I will not ask you to come so far out of character that you are uncomfortable. Just remember that sex doesn't have to be dirty, wild or obscene. It can be something beautiful, gentle, innocent etc. You portray it however you see fit or how you see it in your eyes. I will wait patiently for the results.....

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

since everyone is looking out for some change on the sidelines of the ongoing WS steeped in mystery, I will post one tonight which is mildly sensuous and not gross .."Don't Drive Me Insane" ...Perhaps it would be refreshing experience for the mind while unveiling the mysterious murder in the Study in Pink WS ...lol..

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

read my note to u above
before jess started controlling
many posted many romantic ones
ask any

read my note to u above
before jess started controlling
many posted many romantic ones
ask any

I have never controlled Neopoet, no one person ever has, it is the nature of the site. I was around when the one post a day rule was introduced, may even have been AC Chair, I often was, but although I didn't make the rule I certainly agree with it. Before it was introduced people would dump a hundred or so poems on the site, flooding it, and bugger off never to be seen again.
Since you have never actually given critical feedback I understand that you don't understand that that is what Neopoet is about.

cheers,
Jess
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for once your fucking retort of sort
at times you see
many times u don't
i critique when I am able to
and not just because I have to
fucking all poetry
is like getting fucked openly
hope you can fucking well see
as you recover from fucking
many as ever ....
can you recollect .... I survived as in u i had some pride
why hide
only a hot iron must be banged
as you always did me
I am the only survivor
do u know
the only fucked one
but on the path of glory
end of a fuckin story
now I am the horses what they say!
shoe what without that which fuckin horse can do
and that's all coz of you!Full stop.

I don't read a tenth of the poets I want to. Just too busy for my own good.
Also, don't worry about the twenty four hour limit when concerning workshop posts. They don't count.
And as for sexy poems... Jess is going to run a workshop on limericks in a few weeks. Does that count? They aren't generally "romantic", but they are generally kinda nasty.

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Is up if ur interested...

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

However, go read my rather lengthy new instructions in the syllabus thread.

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And I thought I did a good job. The ghost of anabel revealed her true identity and also revealed where you can find the head. I don't think I started over...I told my last section from the view of the paranormal. If someone wants to go and find the head to see who was originally dead, that would continue where I left off.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

I'm convinced.

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I'm back. Will join Jess ws also. Ready for my the. iOS seems the mov has left Mac taken Annabel who killed fritz left her for and taken me. Oh my my my my climax building in my head

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Excellent frame.

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if this were TV I would normally forestall watching any till I could watch the whole season in entirety (I'm kind of obsessive that way, it's what I've done with "Game of Thrones" and "Hannibal") but here I simply can't resist.
Good on all of you.

cheers,
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This workshop is nothing if not fluid.
I had not given the green light for more lines, but let Carrie slide because I had required a rewrite from her.
However, let's do this.
I'm going to let everyone loose to write "as many lines as they need". Please control yourselves. This will be the last round with Carrie having started it. This means I'm going to ask Rula and Alid to write our epilogues. No one else. We need to wind it down far enough that "I" will write our resolution. So everyone, this is your last go.

As many lines as you need within reason.
I will write a resolution on my turn.
Rula and Alid will each write an epilogue (I will discuss what an epilogue must consist of and its purpose in more detail in a little bit... don't panic you two... its easier than you think and should be fun as it lets you kind of loose to create loose ends).

I'll post this also in the various threads so everyone gets a look at it.
If there are any questions post them in the syllabus thread, so everyone can be privy to it.

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I will now wrap up Mog's part

Our Main writer has been sent on another story, so I shall conclude this story for now.
Just the three Poets to write their prologues,
Yours Ian.T for Wesley

1888 November 22nd A news report that may be true
The daily Telegraph’s story came out of the blue
It told the story of many killings from angles new
Of a creature not found, yet heard of in olden day tales
That was roaming the streets of London town in the 1860’s
It transpired that two hotels near to the old Tyburn gate
One owned by a Mr. T Mackwill a thriving concern until,
A greedy Hotel owner who went by the name of J Creel
Wanted to take his business no matter what ill.
It has been reported that it was out and out war.
Both hoteliers hurting each other to even the score
They didn’t know they had awoken a creature there.
Joining them, we surmised a creature planned their demise.
It is not clear as to what happened but many it did scare
A Mog they said from the days of old fed on their fear.
A story without proof you may all say, even to this day.
A Mog was a horror story from many years very long ago
A reenacted tortured spirit of evil, buried deep in the past.
We can only guess at what would happen if he was freed at last
The blame for all the terrible goings on, set at the door of Creel.

The Telegraph..
In Mr. J Creels hotel the police found the dismembered body of a man.
This investigation was on going, the police also lost a man or two during this inquiry.
The circumstances of their deaths has shook the nation.
Also the untimely deaths of two ladies that have yet to be identified
Now the blame for all the goings on, maybe set to rights.
All the folks that you ask tell a story of a tormented creature
Myth or creatures from a long time gone, must be wrong
An excuse from a few that would make us believe true.
I will leave the conclusions up to you.
Yesterday throughout the country the Telegraph lines sang.
Today I shall try and get a better police report if I can.
Reported in the last hour or so, our reporter on the scene.
Mrs. E Mackwill, has been seen alighting from the York coach.
We will try to give you her story in tomorrow’s issue.

J Sparrow (London Telegraph News)

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This was wonderful

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Prologue or epilogue?

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Just a senior moment this morning when writing the piece, lol
Thank you for your eagle eyes, and you said that you were having problems seeing.
I hope all is well with you there and that life is becoming better, I cant remember who is going to write the EPilogues but they can go ahead now.
Wesley is having problems and I was honoured to be asked to write this piece I am glad you liked it,
Take care of you out there, Yours as always, Ian.T

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Thank you I am so pleased that my write was good,
Yours as always, Ian.T

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So find more reasons to believe in others..

Ian what a way to end this. I suppose I shall start constructing Anabel's parting words since she became such a huge part of this. I shall delve into the mind of a deceased serial killer and will return with something that hopefully makes sense....or not...you know how I like to shake things up....

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Thank you so much for liking the completion I did for Wesley who is not able to attend at the moment.
Now you can write the Epilogue for your character, as there are another two I believe have to write to finalise this marathon.
I also think that this whole piece has been an epic in keeping the plot together and the characters alive as it were.
The fact that Wesley chose the UK in Victorian era may have caused a few people to do loads of research, I know I had to look quite a few thing up as to the police , newspapers and transport, I even had to get rid of Tyburn, as at this time, as they just carried out the executions there of prisoners sent from Newgate prison.
The fact that it was near or on Oxford street caused a lot of problems and was closed down.
It makes great reading and would suit your Nevermore to visit there..
You take care and good luck with your write, and don't forget Mog lol
Yours as always Ian.T xx

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definitely an epic piece of work, nicely done by all who contributed. Like I said before, I would like to see this again in the near future. Perhaps we can take turns running the WS and coming up with ideas, of course with help and guidance from the workshop. I like Wesley's idea of a fantasy or vampire story next. Perhaps he would be interested in letting me run that workshop under his watchful eye?????

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Please see my epilogue that I just posted. It is a bit lengthy but I felt the need to give Anabel a decent exit and the opportunity to tell where she came from and give us insight to why she is what she is. She/he was born normal once but somewhere along the line things got messed up. Please let me know your thoughts.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

Your epilogue is fine Wesley stayed a little longer and added it to the main piece so all is fine.
We have Alid's write, and just our Rula to complete the series.
Probably Wesley may re stream the whole thing as a story of sorts and then we can comment on the completed story ???
Take care, Yours, Ian xx

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Maybe I will under just the basic title. What do you think?

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I knew I was a smart man, but sometimes I surprise even myself. It was a smooth move on my part asking you to write the resolution. Writing it as a newspaper report was a stroke of genius.
All in all it was more than I had hoped for.
I owe you. Collect anytime. I will do my best.
Now, Rula, Carrie and Alid are invited to write an epilogue each. They can speak through a single character or someone unconnected to the tale. They cannot speak from the poet's mouth... that would be an "afterword". It must be a character or characters from the story reflecting on the tale. Even Mog is acceptable. It could suggest anything... the whole thing was a dream, it is the first part of a continuing story (God help me) or they could make historical connections or just ruminations. Anything is a go.

A friendly warning.
Rula and I will be running a workshop on the sonnet (two types only) to be held in the Shark Pool in several weeks.

W. H. Snow

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Thank you for all the work that has gone into this story, I know I wrote hundreds if not thousands of words also the research into the Victorian era, but it is the sort of thing I thrive on.
The workshop has shown as with Barbara's Renga that we can work as a team when needed.
I am going to miss this write as I can see Sonnets and true form clouds on the horizon LOL, I may go back and dig out my Cata epic and do some work on that, Ummmm.
Or could bore you to death and write some new pieces, we will see.
Meanwhile you just have a break and take care of you we need you here for the workshops.
Yours as always Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I fell.... of... my horse ( last resolution i think...................
off!
maybe better
and
section 26 loved
the word should be

'''eavesdropped''

one word rightly pointed out by alid jaan
and thanks all
especially WS you..

An extract from the Daily Telegraph published this day March 24th 1889. These are taken from the trial of the accused John Creel.

Courts of Justice.
Today 23rd March 1889 in the High Court of Justice a Mr. John Creel was found guilty of the heinous crimes of multiple murders, carried out near to, and in the surrounding area of Marylebone.

This site was the original place where the infamous Tyburn tree was said to have been.
It was here a Mr. Mackwill an hotelier was killed, by decapitation and was viciously assaulted with a large knife.
Also in that area and in the waterways, that flank the streets of Marylebone several decapitated bodies were found.
One of the bodies, the one in the hotel that was owned by Mr. Creel it was identified, by the now widow, Mary Mackwill, as her husbands.

This was the main case for the prosecution.

Mr. John Creel tried to plead incapacity by way of possession of himself by an evil spirit, this was not accepted by the court.
Also killed in a local park was the body of one of our gallant police force.
A policeman by the name of James French was identified by one of his children.
The body count has yet to be finalized as it is said that there may be more to be found in the surrounding area.
The case was carried out on the main count of murder by the accused of the two named victims.
The courts trial of the said John Creel came to be a very speedy end.
He was found guilty of the two crimes, and duly sentenced to be hung.
The hanging will be carried out at Newgate Prison on the 26th of March next, bringing to an end a terrible episode in the dark recesses of this London Town.
Jack Sparrow

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these are too fun, post them as blogs or poems in the workshop submissions page. I'm going to close the shop, but only after you run out of epilogues.
Go for it. They're fun.

W. H. Snow

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The story can now be ended as the last report from the Telegraph of the trial and conviction of that miserable Creel is all that I have found in the old papers, lol.
It was about this time that as I was on my way back from work I forgot to pay for a loaf and was transported to Australia,
La, La.
It is quite painful to talk of my trial and transportation to the colonies but if you insist, ????
Yours Jack Sparrow, (ex con)

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I love this court summary.

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I want to read the final work, which judging by the work so far could be published.
Please announce when it is "finished" in so far as a work of this magnitude can be finished.
My congratulations to all involved. This is truly magnificent.
I wait with baited breath.
Wesley, you have proved beyond all my doubts the power of story telling in verse, even having read the classics. You must be fucking exhausted. I hope you will be up for supporting me in my quite short and simple limericks workshop, if not I understand, this is a grand and excellently co-ordinated achievement.

Again I want to congratulate all involved. You have proved that all poets are not selfish, introverted wankers.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

The thing about this workshop that most surprised me was the enthusiasm. Somehow I thought, being experimental with no reference point, that I would get a lackluster response.
I was wrong.
Story aficionados were everywhere. I couldn't keep track.
This workshop experiment is now officially over and I can't be remiss: thank you everyone for a weird, wild ride. I would not attempt this again unless there were a ground swell movement to try once more with adjustments made, so it runs more smoothly.
A storyboard set out in advance for example.
Although the shop is now down, I welcome epilogue after epilogue if it satisfies your poetic hungers and needs. I for one would love to read them. Feel free to post them in the comment section of "Storytelling in Verse (sempiternal). Below (I hope... I'm not computer literate either Chrys) is the link to the site.

http://www.neopoet.com/node/9839

Again, thank you one and all for participation in my imbroglio.

W. H. Snow

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It is how I live and write...this has been an incredibly good time and I would love to do it again. Thank you all for indulging me and allowing my character to take on a main roll. I somehow always wind up a killer...I must do crazy and depraved mind well....thank you again...

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

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