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A Stream

Many friends gathered at a stream
They nodded as their silent rows grew
As if the banks were going to burst

There flowing outward were the words
Row on row likened to ocean rollers
Yet here still confined to a mere stream

Words that caught my breath in passing
Others that brought tears to the eyes
Then, those where fear gripped the soul

Where did all these words come from?
Why did they need to flow outward?
Confined for a while they cried for release

A hush came over the gathering
There in the twilights glow a voice
The spoken word was being born again

This is good the fellowship agreed
We must improve our worldly worth
Help the streams flow with thought

It was then agreed by one and all
That a structure should be built
In haste they built a form of being one

Poetry was born

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Free verse
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And written very well onto the page, a very romantic view of Neopoet's birth. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Need a few reminders to improve its display or form..
Good to see you here though and it is appreciated.
I just sit and write these when I have a space in commenting.
Should really record all on Audio tape but I might be certified talking stuff like that to myself.
You take care out there, Yours Ian.T
PS:- have made it that Poetry was born to make it universal, so that we are not selfish..

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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Thank you for the poem and thank you all for the website

Scott

Scott

It is always a pleasure to walk with all poets, each within their own rights are great.
That we teach here the basic rules that little ole me sometimes(Most times) ignores is good for all walks of life.
I always say that even graffiti is a grand form of poetry it not only enhances a few words it paints them with colours.
But don't say I said that lol,
Take care out there, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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If you have a seprate folder for your best poetry this one belongs there. Until the very end I thought this could easily be about poetry in general and not Neo in paticular. Only thing I'm a bit unsure of , should it be ones, one's or ones'? I'll leave it to you to puzzle that out lol.............stan

I have read up on ones, ones, and can't figure a thing out about ones correct use of ones..
I give in LOL

One's Reflexive and Possessive Forms

In the United States, the possessive and reflexive forms of one — one's and oneself — are often replaced by other pronoun forms. In British English, they are commonplace:

One must be conscientious about one's dental hygiene.
In the U.S. that one's is apt to be replaced by a third-person "his" or (more informally) a second-person "your":

One must learn from one's [or his] mistakes.
One must be conscientious about one's [or his] dental hygiene.
One must be conscientious about your dental hygiene.

Which of the following is correctly punctuated:

(1) "One eats ones dinner."
(2) "One eats one's dinner." ?

I've always assumed that (2) is correct, but then I remembered that we wouldn't put an apostrophe in "It eats its dinner", because "it's" is only used as an abbreviation for "it is" or "it has". So should there be an apostrophe in "one's", which plays the same grammatical role as "its"?

"One eats one's dinner" is correct. This is the possessive apostrophe.
The dinner belongs to Mary. The dinner is Mary's.

Genitive
The genitive, or possessive, form of one is one's, as in
One's experiences shape one's expectations.
There is no strong form analogous to hers and yours:
*One's is broken (not valid)
*I sat on one's (not valid)
*I broke one's. (not valid)
Confucius says "One should make light of ones, one's" so I will change it for MY , Yours Ian.T He He

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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That's one good reply lol

I agree with Stan. This deserves to be universally read.

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Thank you for the lovely comment, as Stan says it should be made universal not just for Neopoet but it just arrived that way.
You take care out there, and let your God tend your ways.
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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