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State mend:
Past hegemony
spawned Present acrimony
Future synchrony
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Unilateral rampage leading to collateral damage rescued by multilateral clearage
Editing stage:
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Comments
Pugilist
Fri, 2018-04-06 11:24
Disjointed
The puzzle of structure is to fit meaning within the constraints for your target audience.
If your target audience is yourself, well and good. If it is a particular subset of the populace, fine, let us know that filter. If it is the world at large, this is not successful.
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Jonathan Moore
OriginalRhyku
Fri, 2018-04-06 12:57
Moore's law
Mr. Moore, my Rhykus are in the mind of the reviewer. Every reviewer deduces what they want to and sometimes it is better that way than trying to explain my context. Thanks for your review and I appreciate your taking the time to review my Rhyku. I must say that you have failed to annoy me and in fact I agree with your review.
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