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Staring into empty space, staring above

They say we all breathe deeply the same air.
Are we or are we not the children of the same life?
Somewhere far away, where even snails carry their burden with pride,
a fossil Sun is shining for the dead as well.
If what we can’t see, can’t hear and can’t feel does not exist,
the astral explosions,
the galaxies lost beyond the horizon
and the fever of lovers who are being consumed by nothing at all
don’t exist either.
We all carry our past like tired snails,
by ourselves or in pairs, we hold hands or hold our breath,
we immerse in a deep silence or breathe a sigh of relief,
we fight hard for what we could easily gain
if we really understood what they say.

Staring into empty space, staring above.
Everything that is sunset is sunrise and sunset once again,
a sequence which we make no effort to imagine
other than fragmentarily.
What could be worse than to obsessively think of the beginning?
What could bring us to a halt better than the burden of lost time?

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you have many profound statements in your write
It gives one the pause to stop and think

Chrys

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Thank you for stopping by!
And I am sure glad that my poem made you stop and think,
this is the main reason I started writing poetry in the first place (and this happened many years ago),
to share my worldview with others and to enable others to have the same insights (if I can call my thoughts as such)
that I might have had at some point in time.

Cheers,
Ionut Popa

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