I wouldn't mind eating this poem - it sounds delicious!

I don't remember the rules for a triolet ( is there a strict syllable count ). So I'll look it up and get back to you, though I'm pretty sure you've got it right ( that's from my leaky memory ).

I found your poem to be uplifting and a joy to read - one observation "pits" do you see pits as pips?

Keep safe Rula

Love your poetry

Mand xxxxx

incantation through the seasons, and love the refrain of the fruit. It's literally, short and sweet! Enjoyed this. Wondered is it "pits" or "pips"? Perhaps it was intentional, or a Freudian slip ;)

Take care,

Chris.

I think the use of the word depends on where you're from. Although I do not in any way claim to be an expert, I teach English (in England) and pit is not a word we use here in the UK, we would say pip or stone dependent on the size and quantity and seed for berries. I gather in the US of A they would say pit, so Rula, as it's your (lovely) poem, it's whichever you chose to use :-) :-)
(Note smiley faces, so you don't think I'm being an arse)! Jxx

PS yes I did edit this, just for clarity :-) Jx

just thought I'd jump in here for a quick remark....
berries do not have pits

I know of no exceptions, but who knows?

I think the term artistic licence has a lot of value in it :-) :-) :-) Jxx

Yes, you're right :-) however, summer hasn't started in your poem, just on the way in, so still no cherries :-) in UK, but possibly swimming in them in Palestine.
Now in the Southern Hemisphere.................. Lol Jxx

Fortunately mercy comes in the form of artistic licence :-) and it being your poem, to have as you like :-) Jxx

In defense of "I will eat the fruit and leave you the pits"

Use of the word "will" to me indicated that the fruit has still not arrived and "leave you the pits" was perceived by me that Rula will denude all the blueberry shrubs in the pit of the fruit and leave nothing for others who will come searching for them.....what a selfish girl she is :)

Anyways the discussion is interesting and shows how the same poem is perceived differently by the readers..

Yes! I looked it up on google - pits is a valid word for the large single seed or stone in soft bodied fruits such as plums and cherries. ( never heard of it until today ).

Your poem is spot on! Well crafted and a brilliant triolet.

Well done Rula - nice write

Love Mand xxx

the point of the argument. Even if you wrote "I'll eat the fruits and leave you the pips" it would have been a perfectly acceptable rhyme. The hint that a word is rhyme driven should only occur where it's obvious replacement is significantly different from the word used. (my humble opinion)

Kernel
I think we have neglected this one.............. :-)
Hehe. Jxxx

But I think your syllable count is out in most of your verses
To the best of my knowledge, the triolet is written in iambic tetrameter ( or just 8 syllables - the French count syllables, and this is a French form so you'd probably get away with that)

I'm sure you will easily fix the verses lengths
eg:.... as spring retreats and summer hits....

Best of luck in the contest
love judy
xxx