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Southern Summer Showers

Southern summer showers
Steam storms silently
Surrounding sleeping skies,

Lightening lures lovers
Like lovelorn luminaries
Leading luscious lips

Into incredible inklings
Ideas ignite intrepidly
Imagining inspiring intentions

Astounding attractive assumptions
Above accepted accustoms
Achieving alarming ambitions

With wonderful words
Weeping wet willows
Wearily waltz warmly

Together to tears
Tender tempting tunes
Tie thrilling thoughts

Pushing poetic passions
Past panting partners
Pleasing primal purposes

Beneath blinding brilliance
Beyond breathtaking bliss
Beautiful beloveds believe

Enchanting embraces exist
Extending enjoyment eternally
Elevating ecstasy evermore.

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I've been playing around with words and meter lately. I love reading and writing different forms of poetry. I was wondering what anyone might think of this one. I wasn't sure what to title it so I just went with the first line of the poem.
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Im not sure what to call it either, but I like it.
your use of words was great and the phrases all went together well. Geezer.

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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Thank you so much Geezer! I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

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Thank you so much Geezer! I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

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Good one. What ist the meter?Its like a fusion of two meters.

Alid

Thank you Alid. I'm not really sure about the meter. I wrote the first line and decided I wanted to try and write a poem using a different letter of the alphabet for each stanza. The rest sorta fell into place on its on. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks again.

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Good write, enjoyed the pictures of tenderness shared by two. The surrounding event intertwined with natures power.
Please read my poem, "Mercies Of Satisfaction"

Eddie C.

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

Thank you Eduardo. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I will definitely check out your work. Thanks again!

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very intricate write and explosive

Thank you so much Emeka!

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