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Slow birds, post storm men.

Slow birds wing over a burnt copper sky,
against the wind they sing,
silhouette petals falling upward,
matching the black mountains back.

Clouds become towering furnaces of rare colour,
beyond description they, dominate the evening,
gifting the sun's dispersion into an unknown spectrum,
more precious than any hanging gem glimpsed

through a jewelers window frame.
The sky is on display, against the relief of our land.
It is hanging its colours in grand recognition of that
bag o' wind god, whose gone and left our tattered town.

The clattering boards of shipwrecked suburbia ease,
and seek now only to soothe our senses by
tapping this earth-bound nebula, drawing in
the cloaks of evening, once ruptured, now regal.

It's enormity shrinking to the golden orb
of a backstage sun, a parting gift,
as the world rolls over
descending into night.

Now the winds domain of howling rises up again,
over the mountains of the unseen night,
tearing the plumage of heaven to ribbons,
and dawn comes cowering, with cold ruffled birds.

Shiver into life now, and trace your arrow arc,
over our battered streets below,
and all I can do is look upon you,
as you fly, and as you go.

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Tis the season of crazy winds in Rosetta, storms without, storms within, all collide at this time of year - yet the birds, the black swans, dabbling ducks, great ocean going gulls retain this grace, even as the sky is being tossed about, like the trees and the houses. An impression. Thanks.
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the imagery here! Very good use of descriptive words and makes you feel as though you are standing there seeing the scene. Nice ! ~ Gee.

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The mad windy season here, comes at the same time almost to the day, apparently it even affects the behaviour of kids in school, i.e. the more blustery, the more boisterous. And the birds seem to rise above it all..

Thanks,

Chris.

Chris Hall - Tasmania

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