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Sing a Song that's Blue

Submitted by docmaverick on Tue, 2012-05-08 17:06

double-up dichondra turf
seeds that sow the same,

out of them the other one
is callin' out the game.

back off in the summertime
the wintertime is nigh,

gonna keep on lovin' you
until the day I die.

sing a song of joyfullness
sing a song that's true,
sing a song that celebrates
bein' me, and bein' you.

stop runnin' 'round in circles
open up your heart,

if you're to love yourself
lovin' others has to start.

blind man with a bottle
sees more than you do,

you've got to sing a happy song
before one that is, blue.

sing a song of happiness
sing of times gone 'bye,
sing 'em when they make us laugh,
and when they make us cry !

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Last few words: 
A song, perhaps? doc.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

Nordic cloud

Wed, 2012-05-09 14:03

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I'm skipping and jumping along the corridor here
thinking of this little song,
its just what I felt today when the cherry blossom came out,

The cherry tree is blooming cherie, cherie

and so it went on, how lovely that you did a little dance too.
Shall we dance in the Spring?

Ann.

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

docmaverick

Tue, 2012-05-15 03:08

docmaverick's picture

I can see you, too ! But, there WAS something about this one....that reminded me of a sort of blues, or folks song. Thanx soo much for your comment. I laughed, I cried....it became a part of me !(Lol).
Seriously, thanx again;
doc.

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