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Sincerity Bathtub

He cried enough
To fill a bathtub
With his tears

And then lay there
His heart & limbs
In salt and sadness

Some called it

But he wondered
If some people
Had ever even met

Their own
Broken heart

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caught my eye. The language neat and succinct. The pacing gives you time to digest each thought.
It's a time honored piece about a broken heart, [ everybody should experience it at least once ].
Interesting description of wallowing in your tears. I got the idea about wondering if anyone had ever had a broken heart before, and having had one, can understand thinking that no one else had EVER felt this way before! Nice piece
~ Geezer.

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thanks, geezer!

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Great surrealistic write!
Wallowing in the bathtub of tears is an ultimate indulgence for a broken heart.
There is something energetic-cool in your poem as if one meets and survives its own broken heart.
It is always a pleasure reading your poems.


thanks, Iriz! I love surrealistic stuff. congrats, as well, on becoming AC Chair!

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My pleasure and thanks


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