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Simplicity
The darkness of the dream
That is the world
Can not stop me
For I am the reality
The one that basks in it.
The child of that illusion
Created by the mediocrity
Imposed by the dream
Of the world
Which is only a fog
Of the true reality
Knowing that for me
There is only one direction
That road I travel
Has not been mapped out
There is no compass
No true north
What is, is my truth
The reading is measured
By staying true to me.
I am the creator and its God
This is my heaven.
But it could be your hell
By your perception
For I will not be like cattle
That is corral
I am my own freedom
And I have wings
You may not see me fly
But I am gone
Soaring high in my sky
I can not be judged
For I myself do not
Believe in your credos
In this my positive energy
Will not be exhausted
All the wasted energy
You burn to try and stop me
Will destroy you and return to me
With what’s left of what is clean
In this I live.
to me your world
Is but a none sensible
Dream.
Remember, the simplicity
Of the impeccable word
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Last few words:
I have started on the road to the first agreement!!
"the impeccable word"
this Poem is about being true in what you say and write, because it it truth that gives us positive energy,
if we say and write only to impress, all we do is waste our own energy.
The agreement is to always use impeccable words of our truth and not someone elses truth, because it might only fog our truth. I for one do not want to live in a fog of truth. I want to clear that fog and live in the truth of my reality
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New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem
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P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...
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Rett
Mon, 2010-12-20 18:26
Eddie
Love the poem, but it really needs to be separated into stanzas for a better understanding of it.
Respectfully,
Rett
"If all printers were determined not to print anything till they were sure it would offend nobody, there would be very little printed. " Ben Franklin
Eduardo Cruz
Tue, 2010-12-21 18:33
Rett
what a pleasure it is for me, to know an old friend is around. I miss you around the site. it's good to hear from you Capt.
Yes your right about the stanza, so under your sound advice, I've made the changes
thanks old buddy nice to see you again!
your old bud Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
author commentRett
Wed, 2010-12-22 18:21
I'm still around
Just a bit busy with things is all. *L* Good to see you back!
Respectfully,
Rett
"If all printers were determined not to print anything till they were sure it would offend nobody, there would be very little printed. " Ben Franklin
Eduardo Cruz
Tue, 2010-12-21 18:52
Mand
I thank you!
I have made many changes to this write, because the point of it can be missed "simplicity" for me means to always be truthful to yourelf, in this way everyone sees your truth that is filled with positive energy. and others can clearly see it and be truthful in return. It is the most simplice thing to achieve. it is done by always useing the "impeccable word" an agreement you make with yourselfs.
Please read "The Four Agreements" by Don Miguel Ruiz
again thank you!
Always Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
author commentEduardo Cruz
Tue, 2010-12-21 19:13
Shirley
yes that is one thing but it is a small part.
but even though I might be in the drivers seat, other can influence my thinking. but by staying true to myself, they waste their energy trying. What comes out of me weather I say it or write it it must be my truth.
I see how the outside world trys to domesticate me with its conventional thinking. things like , how i should act or think, or how A god should control my life. when in fact I am the creator of everything good or bad around me not some God. I myself am responsible there is no one else to blame. When good things happen in my life everyone trys to take credit for it, and when it's bad they say; he didn't listen to me, but the choices I make are mine and I except the good and the bad. this heaven is mine, I constructed it., and to you persay it is a hell. but it is my truth, so I am haapy with it.
thank you Little Witch, I always love your visits and comments!
Always Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
author commentloved
Wed, 2010-12-22 00:31
SIMPLY WONDERFULL
....... am the creator and its God
This is my heaven.
But it could be your hell
By your perception......
I was hoping
you would drop in
one creator
would love to
encounter
another
loved
Eduardo Cruz
Wed, 2010-12-22 11:16
loved
that's it, one creator to another, I'm glad you see it how it should be.
respect to you, what ever your name is.
thank you for the visit to my heaven!
Always E
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
author commentEduardo Cruz
Wed, 2010-12-22 19:06
Rosina
My cold weather sweet, I'm happy you enjoyed it and see it's truth!
Always Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
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