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A silly Sonnet about Kissing (or something)

Some maiden thought, because I stole a kiss,
That this would lead to marriage vows and such;
Imagine her laments and hissy-fits
When I just thanked her, very, very much.
But Lynda; wow! she kissed me then as well,
She kissed me hard, and drove me near-insane.
And when she whispered “Jerry, go to hell,”
I guessed she would not kiss me so again.
But now she strokes my beard with loving touch,
And kisses me—while I play my cello!
Then she says that she loves me very much--
I get mushy, even somewhat mellow.
*****This was just a trip down memory lane
*****With Lynda, who is messing with my brain!

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Structured: Western
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Yeah; Lynda is my wife. and wow--she is hot!
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Is what I see tha fair maiden, Lydia, having in this piece.

You had me hooked until the "Go to Hell" part, then I realized the toungue-in-cheek of the piece. Nice!

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big red, soft lips are my present preoccupation these days. Who can blame me? LOL.
Take care. Jerry/Van

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a woman who knows that she has you lip-locked and a prisoner
having the sense to tell a man to 'Go to Hell!' Inducing someone to chase you
makes it all the more rewarding for them, when they catch you.
Nice story, with a bit of truth to it. ~ Geez.
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Seems like you got my L.'s number alright, lol. She's got me by my nose ring. Lol. Thanks for reading my sonnet, conceived in an idle moment. Jerry/ Van

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