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Shy Jeremiah

Submitted by gregwa8 on Fri, 2018-09-28 00:14

A frog
Is like a dog

It’s got a body
That goes potty

But it won’t shout
For you to take it out

Will only croak
After a tennis shoe poke

Fertilize your garden
“I beg your pardon”

A bit more privacy
Than unblushing Daisy

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Shadowdancer3349

Fri, 2018-09-28 17:10

one word amusing

Geezer

Sat, 2018-09-29 15:11

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