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Shit Happens

Submitted by Ian.T on Sat, 2012-04-21 12:39

Pass me that bloody Sparrow
I will wring words out of him
Let me walk on hot coals to feel the heat
Or walk in the desert to feel thirst.

Why can’t I sleep the hours away
To dream of good things today
I tried to smile but I couldn't win
All that showed was a sardonic grin.

You make me cringe at horrors I see
I couldn't feel sad, or reach out with pity
What the hell do you want of me,
Leave me to languish in my misery.

When I see the horrors of today
In comfort, I watch the terror play
Forgive me if I laugh by the way
This is where I am left you see.

Don’t stand there, I'm in a bad way,
To hell with it, curse this sunny day
I hope it will burn a skin or two
I won’t feel, before I pass through.

I can relate to grief and many things
Though they make me smugly cringe
The satisfied killer’s smile is one,
That goes on a rampage just for fun.

I will return to sit in my worn chair,
Telly and house light the only glare.
There tell me in stories of bloody myth,
Things I know I have missed.

A drowning feeling just the thing
I would return to wreck my home
If I thought for one moment
I would be left alone.

Yet there are others hiding there,
Demons and fear holding my sway
So I will put the thoughts away
For another shit ridden day.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Just a thought for today, in actual fact I am fine, just a wander in this mind of mine, Ha Ha.. Ian. T
Editing stage: 
Editing - draft

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scribbler

Sat, 2012-04-21 23:06

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Sounds like I feel when everything the muse throws my way seems stale lol.........stan

Ian.T

Sun, 2012-04-22 02:27

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I wish they would bring back the number of visits people are making to the poems as it at least gave us some indication of how many people ever read the poems.
It is a disgrace at the moment when a dig the dirt or bad piece of writing complaining about things seems to have so many more comments than the normal poetry, being grumpy today.
Many thanks to you for visit, and comment, mind you this was written as a poetry thing lol, Yours, Ian.T
PS:- Just changed the title to "Shit Happens " to see if it works LOL

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loved

Sun, 2012-04-22 02:40

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some read my ''not to read blogs till its time ''and thereafter none do
on another site
my two poems have crossed 200 reads
it earns for me my daily bread,
in equal measure
as I those reads do treasure..
not many have read it here
sad story.
The end...

1.THEIR NAPE.......................262 READS

2.MY ROMANIAN LOVER ....202 READS

AS OF NOW. TWO ....UNDISCOVERED GEMS HERE.

loved

Ian.T

Sun, 2012-04-22 02:45

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Thanks for your reply ..Did you read the poem ???????
Cant see where you critiqued it ????
Where do you get paid so much for your poetry ??????
Hey have a great day out there it must be quite early for you there 7-44 here in UK, I usually play on site for a while as sometimes with the responses I can't really take things seriously can I ????
Yours Ian.T (Loves you all)

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Ian.T

Sun, 2012-04-22 04:03

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I have little knowledge of most poetic layouts and forms, through lack of learning English when Young, as I went into Avionics and war machines so lost out on poetry and things.
I have been writing though since I was 15 and am in about 40 odd books and have my own published but the expense was too much.
I usually only critique the theme or if I see an obvious error, I did the first workshop on Critique can't recall what happened there just getting too old for having to much concentration, but I will consider your invite, Thank You! Yours Ian.T

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loved

Sun, 2012-04-22 04:18

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I didn't know you were a publisher
that's why perhaps you call me
a bard
sincerely or you are just pulling my leg .???

Do you feel i can fish out some
at least 51 poems
and get them into print

all profits and losses will go to the CANCER SOCIETY
as I now have no need of money

Some blokes sites
knocked me knocked me off
but as so many continue to read me
they add on a penny
after 1000 reads and that's a lot of money
No??

ur 10 points are yet to be printed
in this destroyed society
in which we live as of today..

loved

Ian.T

Sun, 2012-04-22 05:08

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No! I am not a publisher those are the numbers of books my poems and short stories appear in, there are places you can send work to and they publish the poetry, and if you wish you can purchase one or more of the books also you can join others in a compilation of authors and then all you have to do is purchase a few book.
Not sure if you have these in the States but someone will know.
Take care young Bard, by the way, a Bard is one that has been paid to write for someone so we both qualify La La Yours Ian.T

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loved

Sun, 2012-04-22 08:32

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But Shakespeare was
who ever he was,
was an unpaid composer
a BARD No?
...''a bard was a professional poet, employed by a patron, such as a monarch or nobleman, to commemorate the patron's ancestors and to praise the patron's own activities....
Hardly anyone has employed me yet
though a few sites, do give away a cent for 1000 reads,
a scent perhaps, would be more acceptable

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Nordic cloud

Sun, 2012-04-22 16:04

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For a moment I thought you were alluding to the Norwegian
boy with the big gun. That's what's on our minds at the moment
with the big trial, wow he shouldn't even be allowed a trial,
hanged drawn and quartered would be too kind, but democracy
is democracy, and we like it that way too.
But your words had some of this horror in them.

I agree with Beau this began so strongly,
if you carried on in that vein it would be a humdinger.

Ann

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

Ian.T

Tue, 2012-12-11 04:06

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Yes the middle bits are a little soft, what happens I just write, the start is strong, then I get distracted, then I have to finish and make it strong again, a bad habit..
I am a quiet man, but hand him over to me, and you would see the kill for the hell of it come out in me, killing is too good for him though, it would be to fast.
Whoops! I know that they will be dealt with one day as they have to answer for all the things they have done, Yours Ian.T

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Seren

Tue, 2012-12-11 05:19

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I can soooo relate to this I read it three times ... I really like this one very different from your normal write ;) kudos

shit ridden day.... I like that lol

love always JC xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Ian.T

Tue, 2012-12-11 06:24

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There are a few that I have taken off of Neo and put in my unpublished place this was one.
I did a little change to the middle as others suggested and have put it back on stream.
Thanks for your read, I don't really get shitty days it is fiction as all bad things I write of usually are.
I is spiritual and have no bad days no matter what, though I can grieve as others it is more a celebration of their lives and their return to that world I know of,
Have a lovely day for Wednesday as I hope you retire early lol,
Yours Ian.T x

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