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sexual bliss

Submitted by loved on Tue, 2012-08-14 14:05

happiness through sex....
the whole purpose of sex
if any at all
was to procreate
and
thus create
a new entity
you call it happiness
I call it a kid
love is the essence of all living,
remove sex
and
there would be no need of life
no strife
no need of seeking happiness,
as you shall have nothing to compare
no theory of relativity
and there wouldn’t ever have been
an Einstein
and
a mind
like mine

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - rough draft

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Ian.T

Fri, 2012-08-17 17:43

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Oh why are you so intent at jogging my memory, though it is quite a thing to remember and walk around with a grin on ones face all day.
I don't think we will get rid of those things you talk of, just keep the young ones under better control. 7 billion people and that's not the end of it I blame B Egat in the bible he was so free and easy hence the mess we are in...
Good piece young bard, just tighten them up a little, cull excess words and flowery talk, a brilliant piece will then unfold,
Yours Ian.T

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So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Sat, 2012-08-18 00:35

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Good piece young bard, just tighten them up a little, ............................
...............................cull excess words and flowery talk,
a brilliant piece will then unfold,
IAN/Loved

loved

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