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Sensational

Submitted by I_am_Oriii on Fri, 2021-05-28 07:13

Somewhere across seas and hills,
Amidst ruins and pain
Standing in heels
My prince and gain.

Catchy at glimpse, his smile screams heaven!
It fades the scars and sooth the hurt.
His arms, my safe haven
That, I no longer mind a hut.

Neither a book nor a fairy tale,
Yet godmother as fate granted a wish.
She set the pace and made a trail
While out path crossed as stitch.

Now, I and my knight in shining armor,
Glued as one are set to live forever in amore.

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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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Last few words: 
Elated so I decided to pick my pen and this was birth.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Contest: 
Neopoet Random Challenge 3
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Fri, 2021-05-28 10:10

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I see that you got it right the first time! The title, I mean! Oh yeah, the poem is good too! LoL
A knight in shining armor can be sensational for a woman who is waiting for him to appear. I think that your piece is well written and your language is good. Your beginning is well done and the end is what you might expect from a woman who is waiting for her prince. ~ Geezer.
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I_am_Oriii

Sun, 2021-05-30 17:26

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Thank you for your thoughts sir

Oriii

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