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Senryu # 2
while introspecting
my co-relation with life
lilting waves prompt me
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Structured: Eastern
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gregwa8
Wed, 2018-07-18 17:00
this is sweet. "lilting waves
this is sweet. "lilting waves prompt me." love that. love how life acts upon you and your introspection, and you in turn act, or write, or do whatever you do. nice poem.
raj
Thu, 2018-07-19 05:23
Thanks for the read Greg and
Thanks for the read Greg and good to know you liked it...
It is said that as per theory of relativity to compare anything is relative to what one compares with e.g. tall or short...high or low...
in this poem the relative point is an ocean hence the concluding third line...
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raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentRula
Fri, 2018-07-20 15:01
Can't agree
more with greg.
This is an adorable senryu Raj.
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raj
Fri, 2018-07-20 15:36
Thanks Rula....i have learnt
Thanks Rula....i have learnt that the third line should ideally make readers interpret the meaning which is what I have been trying to attempt while writing Sunku. Haiku or Sunku...
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raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentraj
Fri, 2018-07-20 17:52
not here...it was meant to be
not here...it was meant to be in the Senryu # 3
raj (sublime_ocean)
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