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See Me

Everybody has a time in their lives when they try to figure out who they are; the reason they keep breathing, the drive behind every blink. Some of us see who we are at early stages and others become intimidated. And why wouldn’t they be? you’re cold and sometimes ruthless and the most the most heartbreaking things make you smile. Ten times a day you check if he still loves you and even though there is no evidence of faded desires, you doubt that you have the truth. He has met you. He knows what you look like, he knows your moods but he doesn’t know you, really. You have a novel in your soul that could fill the grandest libraries. Each day, a page and each tragedy, a chapter. But the spine of this book is weak and the pages are untouched. For no one has ever dared to venture into your novel. Or perhaps they never cared to. But you can’t blame him, you can’t blame them. You keep your novel locked, like a diary beneath the bed. You keep this booked locked, but you secretly cry for someone to open it. But once again, the spine gets weak and the pages, dusty. The things you’ve told some, the things he’s never asked about. Your emotions are assumed but never confirmed and your actions are feared. All you want is for him to see you, to ask you. Does he see you? Does he see what has moulded you? Does he understand? Perhaps you were made for solitude and love was meant to destroy you. Maybe you love too much, and maybe love will kill you.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Last few words: 
I started this poem when I was 18 and recently went back to finish and edit it. Not feeling seen or being misunderstood by the people I love the most has been a theme in my life and I think others can probably relate to this as well.
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

I guess most of us have been there. I think that a lot of feeling alone has to do with how much we reveal of ourselves and how well people read what we reveal. You know that; it is evident from what you write. I think that you will have a great time here and write more about who you are. Not necessarily on purpose, like a diary, but through the things that you write about. I have found it to be true. Writing about ourselves, gets messy sometimes, and we will do well to be honest and ask ourselves about we really want people to know. This has made me a better writer and I would hope a better human being. I do wish that you would adopt the style of writing in an easier form to read, four or five lines with breaks, this way can be hard on the eyes. ~ Geezer.
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