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The Same Journey

Together we gather
Alone we judge the results
Leanings of lifestyle
So changes the seasons of the mind
Yours to your roots
Me to mine.

Yet do I hear a similar song
Taken from an ageless tune
People always seem to walk in shadows
The shadows of those before
The same sun shines on us both
Though at differing times
Then relative position
Hammers another song.

Should we then shake off before times,
Let the universe evolve
Tell us that we must also choose
Do we evolve into a new world
Or do we destroy ourselves.
I wonder if we are to be given the chance.
I feel that the old Spirits shout
In the quiet of each day

I hear their voices
You are here to learn of many things
The great Spirits you know
They are the same
As these that walk with me.
I see them smile in their way
If only we could understand.

I am told we are not ready.
They say we have more journey's
Never will all reach out to perfection.
That some will be happy just to be
You in your world, me in mine
One thought though in many forms
Go well young poet,
One day there will be that gathering
I shall feel your thoughts.
As we are of the same roots.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
This was as an answer to a comment but it became too long to leave as a comment so here it is streamed, With the greatest of respect for Steve (Esker)
Editing stage: 


A great way to comment poetically which brings out the contrasts and similarities of the world we live in and providing encouragement to express and share thoughts poetically from our own perspectives.


raj (sublime_ocean)

I was commenting on Esker's work and it went too long so I sreamed it as a separate piece.
Thanks for your visit, look forward to a little more time on Neopoet.
Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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Yes, I had read your message in "Last few words" and knew it was a comment on Esker's work, which is why I said "A great way to comment"..


raj (sublime_ocean)

same or similar
I really wonder
but raj has summed it well
I have read


I did a Loved on this as it was a comment I was putting on Steve's reply to me and I ended up writing too much too long lol,
Thanks for dropping in your tea was getting cold so I have left a glass of room temp red wine for you,
Yours Ian..

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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