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The ground was cold and hard;
i was gasping for air as i ran.
barking, barking was behind me
i dared not to look back
for i was afraid that if i did
i'd be trampled by the dogs that chased me.
i was guessing there were about five or six of them,
all police dogs,
oh shoot, i thought, as i dropped the runaway file.
ahead of me i saw Allie and Ben running for their lives.
i was tired, yet i kept going,
running for freedom,
for a new life.
i stumbled backwards, though,
and reached for the files.
this was the beginning of
my new life
as the keeper of the Runaway Files...

to be continued...

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way to go sis! no critique cuz i'm the one who typed it. :) ;)

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