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Rest in peace father

Undaunted was your bravery,
this, to your assailants was a mystery .
Your death was outstandingly heroic,
Inspite of bullet wounds you stood stoic.

Had you engaged your assailants in a duel,
your death would have been impossible.
Only cowards assail a man unarmed .
A pseudo glory they only earned .

Your bravery earned you a true glory,
generations unborn will tell the story.
Your peaceful rest is certitude ,
on this anchors our fortitude .

I salute your undaunted heroism,
I will forever adore your heroic stoicism.
Rest!! undisturbed in quietude,
with joy and bliss in plenitude

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this is not based on fact. Losing one's father is a hard thing and writing about it even harder.....stan

Thank you so much Scribbler. And living with the reality that I won't be able to see him again forever is even the hardest .He was assassinated by unknown gun men in his house.

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a nice Eulogy
i enjoy it
though understanding how painful it is.
nice one

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

Thank you so much Chiori. It's indeed painful.

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The second verse, did lose the rhyme.
So for the second line, CRUEL is the crime.
The fourth line then, should end with HARMED.
I hope with my critique, you are not alarmed.
Thank you for the read

Thanks so much Ja Ja for reading .

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Fathers will forever be etched in are minds of what they have accomplished for the family good call.

Mario Vitale

Thank you so much Chevyvent, I appreciate your comment.

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this is really great i love the theme

Thank you so much Purplekay.

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I think it was well imbued with respect for the deceased. Thanks for sharing.

Thanks so much Osadolor Osayande.

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For your loss
Lovely poem, I could feel your pain through this

Thanks to you Sewie Smalls.

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Sorry for your lost,i really fell your pain.
This reminds me of my father i lost him when i was[9]nine

Thank you so much Simon. And sorry about your father too, though it has been long.

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I loved that it was very contained. Well done.

Thanks so much Osadolor Osanyande .I appreciate your comment.

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it is a great loss
''mom and pop''
I lost both within 9/ten months
half a century ago or so

Mom's Smiles
my poem
you need to read
across the globe 'tis being treated
as my best

it was also posted here
well taken o friend
you may find it at my long lists end

Thanks so much Lovedly.And so sorry about your Mum and Dad too. I will check the poem out Lovedly.

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Amazon since
all sands left
down deep below
heavens alone know!!!

We know that life is a journey and not a we go through challenges or hindrances along our path, we must assure that we learn in every experience of every day that may bring to us..more important is we always pray and admit mistakes..

Mario Vitale

Well said, Chevyvent, thanks once again for stopping by, I really appreciate.

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