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Puter

I frequently use the word 'puter as an abbreviation for computer. Tonight someone, hearing it for the first time said they thought I was saying something rude. Which prompted this.

Puter pudenda
pubicly portentous
publicly portraited,
parole violated.

There was a young man whose new 'puter
could not have been any way cuter
but lacking pudenda
or pubic addenda
he just couldn't manage to root her

Review Request (Intensity): 
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Last few words: 
I have never before ticked- "Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly) " So I thought I would just for the craic. Say what you fucking like.
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on the highly suspect 'portraited'?

cheers,
Jess
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