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Precision

I am not the only
person in this world.
Somewhere, at this precise moment,
someone else also holds
a tiny red flower.
Perhaps a florist,
or a child,
an artist,
or someone without sight
but nevertheless knows they hold a rose,
somehow just as red.
I am not alone
tying my shoe at this moment,
even more precise,
my left shoe.
The chance is strong
given that there are so many
left feet on this vast earth.
Afterall, there comes the time,
the moment,
to tie each left shoe.
I open my eyes each morning
the same time as countless others.
Slice a tomato,
smile into someone's eyes,
or turn page 44 in a magazine
within the same precise moment as others.
Chances are good. Strong.
There are billions and billions of us here.
And I am not alone.
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Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words: 
I love to watch people, and can easily imagine what other people around the world are doing in their busy, daily lives.
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

a great picture of being a part of all that happens here on Earth. I liked the premise that there are many people all over the world doing the same things at precisely the same time. It kind of brings us all together doesn't it? I see nothing I would change. Nice to see you writing again, ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

Thank you so much for reading! I did feel a sense of togetherness when writing this one - a nice respite from all that we let divide us.

L

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It’s got that butterfly effect kinda feel to it. Like a monologue over a montage of clips.

Tim

I very much like your "butterfly effect" description. Thank you for reading!

L

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A deep look at all the various people and things that are going on in the world at the same time we are living our lives. Sometimes we take that for granted. Great write.

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It did feel pretty deep writing this, but there was something very obvious and simple in my thoughts, too. I agree - it's good to remind ourselves that we are on the same planet, spinning in the same direction.

Thank you!
Lavender

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