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Pounce Not

Submitted by lovedly on Tue, 2022-02-01 15:39

I'm just any others
day's dream
they can see
yet

at night those who dream too
get wet
despite the snow

the hour of meeting me
the sun has to
beget
yet

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
the hungry poeyet
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Race_9togo

Wed, 2022-02-02 14:03

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I'd like to see "yet" at the end of the first stanza, though.

Respectfully, Race

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lovedly

Wed, 2022-02-02 15:24

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With grace

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Ray Whitaker

Wed, 2022-02-02 19:24

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The 4-3-4 line stanzas work for me. Effective use of white space…

Don’t know what relation the title has to the poem…

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lovedly

Wed, 2022-02-02 21:43

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this verse is as an answer to a stupider verse
some poet conversed thanks
anyway

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