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Political Pawns:

No morality
Dealing with duplicity
Loss of Sovereignty

Style / type: 
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Client states prostrate to alien dictates
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if you can make the form work, would be-
No morality
Not dealing with duplicity
Will cause Loss of Sovereignty

cheers,
Jess
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I like your version - it is clearer - although the Rhyku requirement of 5-7-5 syllables will not be met.

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