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Pillowed Dreams

while some
are ambitious
with dreams
to achieve,
I have mine pillowed
though I often could
hear them murmuring

"believe"

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A beautifully succinct poem but not lacking in imagery for all its brevity.

Joe

My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.

A beautifully succinct poem but not lacking in imagery for all its brevity.

Joe

My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.

Sorry for the belated reply.
Very much appreciate the comment. Thank you

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Although the "English language is as the English speaking people speak it" (or write it ), technically "got" is not a word. There is never a reason to use it unless a character is speaking in a dialect that would use it. "Have" will always suffice.
Sweet poem Rula.

W. H. Snow

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English-excuse me- is a bit weird language, don't you think so?
Any learner would think that a word is a word as long as it is listed in the dictionary and is heard of the TV .
Ah! I learn something new everyday and the road is still long.:)
Thanks for the visit.

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"I" before "e" except after "c".... weird.

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this is a rule we learned a while ago

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As with Beau this is a very good piece..
When at school, in English, they would always say that, got, get and the plurals of the same, were weed words, and should be avoided as their English is not good..
I await others to confirm this as it was a long time ago, lol,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

For reading and for the helpful thoughts.I've edited accordingly

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let others have fun

loved

Always appreciate your comment.thank you dear

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pen like a rookie - impressive lines.

And many thanks for your lovely comment

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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