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Pieces of the puzzle

Submitted by bjucks on Wed, 2020-04-22 18:38

May my image forever hold
Its weight in scale and gold
Distorted it will soon seem
Unavoidable with sweet time
And the space in between
But still, wrap it with a bow
And fancy heart arrows
Because somewhere in there
A wild love is all you know
When you look back on us
After finding out who you are
On your couch, or in the car
I hope you smile and trust
That it was not for nothing
Despite of how we tried
To empower each other
And mirror endless love
There was nowhere to hide
Something inside me changed
That’s when I began to realize
To love is also to lose
Permanence is fleeting
No matter how you show
Loyalty and devotion
You cannot fix something
That already been broken

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - draft

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c lynn brooks

Sat, 2020-04-25 17:05

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that has already been broken (add the word has
or perhaps
that already is broken
very sad poem but all to often true

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Gracy

Sat, 2020-04-25 18:53

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Good poem, needs some tweaking because you've missed out on some grammar rules. Will try to return soon. All the best, it's a sad poem but so true.

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