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Picasso's Blue

Submitted by gregwa8 on Fri, 2019-05-03 02:10

like a cardinal
in a world of white

your heart
in this frozen place

you are a fire
with wings

the painter's
favorite color

Van Gogh's yellow
or Picasso's blue

the top point
of the golden triangle

at least in my world
you are the star

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Geezer

Tue, 2019-05-07 18:04

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The title is good, it drew me in. Very good visuals, I particularly like the "you are a fire with wings".
I can relate to the colors being like moods. I think I remember a famous artist being in a "Blue Mood"? Was that Picasso? ~ Geezer.
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