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What’s wrong with you?
why must you not

Are you feeling depressed?
here, swallow this compacted pill
of bite-sized ignorance
to send those feelings,

We’ll label you
with bright white stickers
plastered to your forehead
stained with permanent ink
from the moment you were born (with innocence non-the-less)

Hand in your aspirations at the door
for we’ve got new ones, better ones, shiny ones, fast ones
self help books and mortgages and new houses and cars
blessed with an insatiable desire for more

What do you mean you don’t want this
spoilt and greedy and pessimistic
you could be starving in Africa (not taking into account that we’re starving here)
when will you grow up (into conformity)


you’re fucking insane

What’s wrong with you?

Editing stage: 


Fairtales and more
I seen these as a kid
we had the real stories...color plates
drawings to haunt imagination forever..
Maybe why I loved HEAVY METAL
and Cover art for records..BLONDIE

Had asthma....colds often
was shunned in grade five..
was reading all time to class
said no one day...Someone else
needs to share too...Teacher
lost it on me...."Dont you ever
say No to me" frothing...recess
bell rang.....nicest guy till then..
stunned the class...Like I had
magic..Had much problems
growing up...too far to drive to
see psychiatrists...just drank..
then out on my own....Not problem
at home..Bye bye...Got truck job
car mortgage child....lost all..
lost friends i had too ex girlfriend
but they really wernt friends..
competitive....non conformist
said the same things too me
even on meds...counselling
treatments therapys...

I believe creativity is a form of

I always said if we drove
high end suvs
everyone would wipe our ass
for us
people would fight for that job

or if we dress down and
have much money here
there...what are we then
part of an army
reaching whom
for what
the connections

i myself found meds
that take the whitecaps
off thoughts
so far it works

I grew up into a kind of conformity
from my earlier years
took forty years
of an almost near sub existance
my socialization came from both
worlds then...

belonging to my own wavelength
stattion is hard

I dont wanna belong
I just wanna be

sounds like a good motto

Thank U

I guess some of us just don't fit in with this system, in a way though I'm glad I don't see eye to eye with most. It's a blessing and a curse, thanks for sharing.

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i had the basic elementary schooling...
by seven the lack of maths.the
dyslexia about spelling and meaning
in syntax etc shunted me to where I
would make it best...
But I hung it out and got my twelve

I made up for it though by reading...
much...and after years later
picked up reading again
read enough and you just
get an intuitive understanding
correct spelling

There are people whom
are out there....think out there..
creative and otherwise
I know a few up here...
we are out here...

Thank You!

This is a good write and would fit into the contest that Stan is running, it would make a very good "Du Bois" poem.
Have a read of his works and see what I mean.
Well done, and no matter who sees what, and those that disagree with your sight, need to expand their point of view as they have tunnel vision.
You just write your own thing, Maybe the only thing to learn is correct form when thinking that way, otherwise "BE YOURSELF".
Yours as always Ian

Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

You can call me Nick
made this username ages ago and have no idea how to change it hahaha. Thanks for the feedback I'll take a look into the contest

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I think to change a name on the site is hard.
I was at one time Ian.T but I couldn't get into my account.
So am now on a new name as Sparrow it was easier.
Yep your works are good enough to join the contest so don't be shy it is fun,
Yours Ian..

Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

I have read your work before ,but this particular piece interested me. Perhaps it is the conversational style of writing that you have used

I must say I am not a fan of the we've got though I would (my opinion only) have used we have
but you may have used it for effect
your second stanza really held my eye
nice work

Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

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